Sooo, about humans' inability to use God KI... Have humans become weaker, since the human God of Destruction or did Whis only say that there was a human who became a GoD to encourage Krillin or is this actually a plothole/mistake?

And here we can see how feeble to potential of man truly is, the author is a perfect metaphor for how weak man is

Thank goodness, I was beginning to believe you had either abandoned the story or died! Let me tell you, I would rather not lose one of the best dbz fanfic writers on the net.

I usually get annoyed when someone takes this long to build up to the climax. But for some reason I don't mind. Keep trucking on

This is by far the best written chapter of your story it has great exposition in it

Is it possible to do ki magnification or the other thing with kaioken

I have loved to read all 13 chapters . It is actually the first ever fanfiction i start er to read. I like it that you try to cover every main character. I have a small dislike that krillin cant achieve a godly form... but he might in coming chapters surprise the Gods. I am looking forward to the next chapter.

Well I don't like how racist krillin is but I'm still willing to give it a shot.

I think it was brilliant giving scenes with Gohan and everyone else training up. It'll only lead to an vigorating event. I am for sure anticipating Krillin's progress to becoming stronger. This really is a good story and can't wait to read more.

Oh hey glad you got another chapter coming. I was trying to understand how Krillin became so strong,i know about the ki magnification but how did his speed and strenght got so strong he could beat beerus to space until he only came back in the evening after hours? is ther some secret? Everyone seeems to be in the mood for fighting,that is really good...oh shit 300 tons? thats a hella lot of weight,androids sure are strong,can she really increase her power even though she is an android?

I enjoy the slices of life like Marron crush for goten, 18 talking to her brother and how she wants to find her dad...maybe she even use her real name and stop calling herself eighteen

Good progress

Happy new years!

It's fairly obvious that your heart wasn't in this chapter, so I can see why it took you so long. Though it was cool to see a deeper glimpse into the others, it felt like we were just going from beat to beat with little in between.

I would've loved to see the latter half of Gohan and Vegeta's fight, for one.
I also think it would have been worthwhile to actually write some of 18 and Whis's fighting - I get what you were going for and that you were trying to focus on Marron, but I found it disappointing that all we got was a comparison to Cell and then NOTHING for the second fight.

The whole Marron scene felt especially rushed, especially Goten getting his hair cut.

I think it'll be interesting to see what you have in mind for Gohan - Mystic God, perhaps? It would make sense, given his unique powerup.

My advice would be to take your time with the next chapter - write an outline first, then a first draft, maybe run it by some people, then clean it up and add/remove where you see fit. This is a good fic, but I'd say this is your weakest chapter yet, and it's left me with little good to say.

PS: Unsure where this 17/18 storyline is going, but it might be a bit too much to slap on top of Krillin's, Gohan's, and Goten/Marron's.

This story has definitely been an interesting read so far. I'm disappointed that it's not been updated in a couple months, but you say that you intend to finish it and I'll take you at your word.

I really like the way you're developing Krillin's personality - none of it seems particularly out of character, and generally I can imagine Krillin saying or doing the things that you depict. The same can actually be said for alot of the cast, and the stuff that I can't see being said or done is generally still within an "acceptable" range for my personal view of the characters.

Beerus warming up to Krillin is a nice little plot-point and I have to say that it makes sense. Krillin was basically fodder, but at this point he's at least some entertainment for Beerus, and he's become alot less of a pushover which is probably a large piece of that puzzle.

It's a good choice not to go the God Ki route, and I think the path you're going down instead is pretty unique! I might just have to use some of your Ki Magnification concepts for my own projects, if it's no issue.

Now, for my personal 'Cons' for the story.
While I understand time limits are in place so that this doesn't interfere with the Black Arc and Top (which you don't intend to write), it is somewhat disconcerting that Krillin is growing so strong in this six month span. I feel as if it would make more sense if his training was taking place over a year or even two years, however I also understand your reasons for not going that route and the story is fine either way.

I have a strong dislike for Mai having a crush on Trunks. Mai may be a child but she is an adult woman in a child's body - this makes her having a crush on a teenaged Trunks morally questionable at best, and I ended up skipping through that scene pretty quick.

All of the character development going on in such a short span is also a bit tricky, as it has the reader juggling quite a few storylines in very short chapters - not to say that you should omit the developments, though. Rather, it would be nice to see longer chapters that give a greater spotlight to each individual sense.

All in all, this story so far has been a great read and I hope to see more chapters soon. Write at your own pace, though, because of course you should be enjoying writing just as much as we enjoy reading!

As TFS put it best "it's me Krillin everyone's friend."

DAMN! Krillin sure grow some balls as well,to talk like that to a god of destruction like BEERUS? I like to think surprise attacks would work on him but man i guess he dint see that coming? I found really fun the way you make this,it gives me a happy feeling of waiting for more and urging for it,Cant wait to see Goku and his long time Friend having a good fight