Reviews for Mystery Of The River |
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DelanaKiger chapter 8 . 8/8/2019 I like where this is going! What with Kayla making more and more friends outside of River, and these guys wondering if she may not only help them reach the surface, but help them adjust to it as well. Is she going to be this fic's version of Frisk? I suppose I shall find out! ;) Just a couple of notes/questions: 1. Doggo isn't Dogaressa's husband. Dogamy is. (Though, typing that out now, I think I can see why you got confused.) 2. River Person taught Kayla sign language, right? To disguise her voice? The story doesn't seem to show her using it. Also, how do the monsters' voices sound different from those of humans? 3. A thing with your stories in general, I think your words tend to be pretty repetitive. Maybe try writing everything like you normally would, then go back and use a thesaurus. Proofreading is a good idea in general, really. After all, you do seem to have a few grammar mistakes here and there as well, though I can't remember if there was a time where I was unable to figure out what you meant. |
mallarieTwinkies chapter 2 . 1/25/2019 pretty cool |
Steelcode chapter 14 . 11/22/2018 SUPER FANTASTIC STORY! CAN'T WAIT FOR THE NEXT ADVENTURE! |
newbienovelistRD chapter 14 . 11/21/2018 Fantastic story, Amiga! Loved it all the way through! :) |
Dragonsrule18 chapter 14 . 11/21/2018 Aww! Such a sweet ending! |
dream1990 chapter 14 . 11/21/2018 Nice |
Dragonsrule18 chapter 13 . 11/5/2018 Wow! Amazing way to break the barrier! |
Steelcode chapter 13 . 11/3/2018 OH MAN THE BARRIER'S GONE! WHAT'S GOING TO HAPPEN?! CAN'T WAIT CAN'T WAIT! |
dream1990 chapter 13 . 11/2/2018 Yay |
newbienovelistRD chapter 13 . 11/2/2018 Whoa! Awesome! Can't wait for the epilogue! Sweet chapter! |
Dragonman0007 chapter 12 . 10/16/2018 Spooky scary skeletons... |
Dragonsrule18 chapter 12 . 9/24/2018 Yay! Gaster is back! How'd the girls restore him though? |
Dragonsrule18 chapter 11 . 9/24/2018 Aww! I'm so glad little Frisk has entered the Underground. And I love that you paired Kayla with Napstablook! Blooky deserves love. |
Dragonsrule18 chapter 10 . 9/24/2018 Uh oh! I wonder who the shadow is? Flowey? |
newbienovelistRD chapter 12 . 8/16/2018 Babybones...that nickname is just too cute :) |