Terrible

It seems you were able to salvage this and prevent it from becoming a harem, so great job on that. Also Nate seems much more mature now, and your writing seems to have improved. Well done.

I really missed this fanfic. It trully should get more recognition.

AYYYY! welcome back. good to see you.

I'm dropping this story like a rock, harems do nothing but ruin good stories.

Welp it's turning into a harem, was good from the beginning but it looks like it's time

Thanks for the chapter, and can't wait for the next one.

I noticed that your story doesn't get too much attention and I can't understand why. You are doing a very great job writing.

This whole speaking pokemon thing is really confusing it would have been made easier if you had actually establish that ace was in fact a talking pokmon, im assuming a pikachu seeing how the enemy said flying rodent. I had rightfully assumed he was a human the whole time and it really threw me off.

Great chapter as always, and I see you added some jokes in which is in my opinion was greatly needed.
I think this world needs some light humor, sorry to hear about whats going on in your life. I went through something similar, so I understand. Anyway great chapter and keep it up:)

Shit I forgot I am a guest email the code at

Hey yo chief what is the discord

Ever heard of the most important rule of story writing? Its called show dont tell, its what sepertates amateurs from professionals. You are painfully close to being on par with some of the best writers on this site. The story is solid, the characters are solid, the villan is mysterious and unknown, as it should be. The only issues are the delivery of plot and the speed of the story, but fixing the former can inherently remedy the latter. If you tell more stories instead of skipping it and having a paragraph of a flashback later on, you will make the story feel a little more realistic; the flashbacks can stay, but this is how i would have delivered the news of him killing the kids:

So it gets set up that he has to do a solo op against the enemy, he is dropped in and told to aprehend or eliminate a high priority enemy; Fang, the human and pokemon trafficer that is selling pokemon and people into slavery. You describe the infiltration, silent or loud depending on preference. He continues going deeper into the facility untill he gets to where the flashback begins. He is given the ultimatum and the chapter ends.

The next chapter says something like: several whatevers later. And has

The story is a little rushed in terms of pascing, but I do understand that pacing is hard to do well.

Also you could separate longer chapters into two or more parts if you need to. I don’t think too many people will mind.