your mc is still a damn bitch boy. I mean come on just stop crying fucking constantly

where is incinerate anthem it is better than trick vanish that only seal power
night reflection is a normal sacred gear and incinerate anthem is a longinus add both together and would make him have chance to grow strong , you only made this story to devlop your oc for harem not power i mean trick vanish is not even a good choice for a potential growing power up

If a rewrite is done could Trick Vanish he swapped out for a different gear and while still being a magic fighter or wizard type fighter he’s more of a physical hand to hand fighter as well.

Better than canon.

Not that i dislike this fic, but one thing anoys me about asia pairings is that every OC either sees her as a little sister or loves her within 5 seconds and are willing to abandon their comrades for her. I know this is not how you meant it, but it just looks like that, i mean yumi, Ise and Akeno(?) are his friends, but here goes Take saying he will leave his friends just for her! I'm sorry, but that just pisses me off! Other then that good story.

Really disappointed that, even with all of the genderbends you added, that Raynare isn’t some tsunderer addition to his harem. You even have her calling him sama this chapter

Another story that I've caught up with, my 6th one, I believe... I love every chapter of all of them, keep up the good work

- Wow, 13 chapters. At last I'm done. Well, let's see what I remember of it all.
- That witch who wants Takato's corpse is obviously Walburga. Shame he wants to kill him. There goes my weakness for gothic-looking characters.
- Dohnaseek just had a Trump moment. And Kalawarner and Mittelt followed his lead, like a blind man who leads another. Well, they got what they deserved. Good reference though.
- I think Raynare's appointments are what the line between her fragile sanity and becoming a yandere. I can see why Takato thinks she's annoying though. That dream she has with the seven nights and stuff, smells like biblical reference, but I could be mistaken.
- Takato lives with Vali? Now that's protection.
- I agree with Takato and Asia: Salem Saberhagen is funny.
- And Princess reappears. Well, at least she got better. Her threatening Riser with a chainsaw was funny. Nicely done.
- Takato is the only man in a female peerage? Sounds like fun read to me.
- Oh-ho, the rivalry between Neko and Phenex started early. And it's only going to get better with time.
- Confusing Grayfia with Sakuya Izayoi had a pass, but Xuelan with Chun-Li? Xuelan only has the hairstyle, the dress and the good looks. I wonder if Takato will figure out they're not who he thinks they are.
- Takato's parents despised him, and only his recently deceased grandmother cared for him. Looks good. Looking forward to see more of them.
- Takato doesn't remember much of his past? Interesting...

mmmm I just can't help but criticize that last part. It's a bit of an asspull for the fallen angels to just show up randomly. And with their whole team set up? There's just no reason to believe they have that kind of reconnaissance as a rogue group. Maybe if it was just a couple fallen and exorcists...wait no. It's just completely unbelievable. It would have been better if you showed that 1 exorcist found them and trailed him while the group gathered up. It's still a bit of a stretch considering how the two evaded the devils' information(they own Kuoh, they should have at least caught a trail) yet somehow not the fallen, but at least it shows the process, which makes it a little more believable.

Aww this is disappointing. I wanted Annihilation Maker :/...the one ones just seem unreliable. Mainly Incinerate Anthem, seeing as he IS a devil and those flames it creates are basically holy flames to the nth degree. Not to mention it could leave him whenever it wants. As cool as the thing is, I don't expect much from it. At least the other 2 have potential to be on par with a Longinus, given he's the MC :P. If it was a random character, he would be a stepping stone. Well, even other Longinus were stepping stones/foils for Issei in the original so I suppose that's not an argument.

I just feel that Annihilation Maker would have made up for ORC's number issue, and used the MC's anime/game knowledge a lot better. Creating different types of monsters for would be perfect as someone who likes to fight with intelligence.

Quick question: Is Isane bisexual in this story

When are you going to do chapter 14 you don’t have to if you want to.

recompensa para takato por su pelea en el rating game tener una cita con su amada sakuya izayoi

Awesome work. It's amazing how your writing has improved over time. It feels polished. Keep it going.

Hehahahahaha! Takato and Sakuya are such a pair. It's hilarious.

Hahaha! Isane is hilarious.

Oh wow, I should've seen the Chun-Li thing coming. Nice.

The cat and bird rivalry is awesome.

Great work on this chapter.