A very interesting story here so far! Will Gohan become a god eventually in this story?

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Hi there, Really I Hoep you finish this :D I am drawing a manga to this at the moment and it's so brilliant!

Im interested. Your concept of the Super Saiyen forms are quite interesting and i think your story is the only DBS story that focuses on Gohan who was and still is (even though Toriyama kinda gutted him) my favourite character In the DB universe. I actually like the fact that you made the power comparison between the king of Sadala and the universe 7 saiyens since its obvious they would be way stronger (i mean if a battle for the univese is going on Champa would definitely pick the strongest fighters, since the once picked were Cabba, Kale and Couliflaw (i wrote that wrong) from the Saiyens its obvious they are the strongest Saiyens pf Universe 6).

Though i was hoping someone would comment on Pan since she was so powerful and gifted since birth to be able to fly. Goku had to learn much like i think Vegeta had to and Gohan for all his power at such a young age also had to learn though he learned much earlier then Goku did since Goku learned to fly at his mid to late teens and Gohan was flying at about 9 to 10 years of age. So i was really hoping to see a reaction from the Universe 6 Saiyens to pan like what Vegeta showed when he saw what Pan could do at only the age of 1 to 2. That wouldve been funny.

I love this story. It's good to see a want for God's to pay for their crimes. Also, the explanation you have for Super Saiyan is quite imaginative.

huh I never thought about the super saiyan forms this way cool concept

Good chapter.

interesting kinda makes sense since potential unlocked is a power up granted from a kai who's a god so it could possibly lead to one gaining god ki.

Well well, you certainly make things interesting. Keep up the good work!

Not bad. I like where the story is going and I can't wait to read more.

This was a really neat concept.