Hmm . . . interesting. I wasn't expecting this to happen. I thought it was going to be your AU into the movie, where it's basically the same thing, only the Pure Ones win and Kludd and Soren's family are pro-Pure-Ones. But then I realized that that's basically the movie without the AU, and it would make more sense to have it like this. So great job! I never saw this coming!

I hope this doesn't mean that Soren "dies" like what happened to Kludd in the movie. Or will it basically be the same thing where Kludd falls into the fire and Soren watches?

So, I'm guessing that Kludd will escape the Guardians and find St. Aggies, while Soren stays with the Guardians and becomes one of them and takes Eglantine to the Tree?

Can't wait for the next chapter! Well done! See you soon! _

Noctus Fury

This chapter was far better than the last one, well for me at least. I really liked that you changed it more than what it was in the actual movie . I wonder what is going to happen to Soren and Kludd after being rescued by Bubo and Strix Struma to be brought back to the Great Ga'hoole Tree, I guess I'll figure it out next chapter in this good developing story, so I guess I will see you in next chapter.

I always loved Strix Struma in the books and even in the movie, where she only has seconds of screen time. I’m glad you used two of the minor characters from the movie.

And unlike Jatt and Jutt, Bubo and Struma were courteous to the young owls instead of handling them without care. With how the story is going, I just want to keep skimming over the words to figure out who the real villains are in this universe: The Guardians, or the Pure Ones?

Being unpredictable is a sign of a good storyline — keep up the good work.

Wow! I really love this story idea! I hope that you'll be able to continue it! I love it! XD

My only problem is that I still think that even if the Pure Ones won, Soren, Eglantine, and the parents would still be against the Pure Ones, and Kludd would still be the black owl. Just my opinion. I don't see Noctus and Marella changing just because the Pure Ones won.

Anyway. I really hope that you'll continue this and that you'll update this. There aren't enough Guardians of Ga'Hoole and Legend of the Guardians fanfics these days. It's sad. :'(

Thank you for writing this and for sharing this with us! It means a lot! _

Noctus Fury

This, unlike most stories I’ve read on this site, actually has some potential. It completely warps everything about the original movie, and the owlets’ parents are all for the evil Pure Ones. But this just may prove that real purity comes from the inside, not good breeding.

I hope the guardian win

To say I enjoyed this is story is an understatement.
I hadn't ever thought of this concept before, but now that I've seen it, I really liked it!
I think you should continue this story if you can, if you want to :)
This was awesome!

It is only natural I have a liking towards these kinds of stories (Pure One-focused), but, I must say I'm a bit more worried about this idea when comparing it to your other project (To be a Pure One).

Don't get me wrong, you do have a good idea to offer in regards to this story. What bothers me is that it'll just be a copy-and-paste style plot with the dialogue, events, and other factors being painfully identical to what happened in the actual movie.

I understand the irony that is demonstrated by using this method, but to me (and I'm sure to some others) it is quite dull and will easily be unoriginal.

Do I know that'll be the case? No, as I have high hopes that you'll make the plot completely original. I would like to think that you will come up with your own plot divergences and better adjust the setting to match the present status quo (and the eventual change of it).

I think more than anything, I'm just asking you don't just replace every word that says: "Guardian" and replace it with "Pure One" like you did in this chapter. It just . . . seems lazy, to be honest. What reason does Soren's family have to believe in the Pure Ones over the Guardians? That is the kind of stuff I would want to know to better grasp this AU plot. Leaving it unexplained leaves much to be desired, but at least you do point out their characters were a bit OOC (Out-of-character).

Like, if the Guardians snatch Soren and Kludd (just like St. Aegolius did in the movie), I don't have a problem with that. So long as you make it unique and interesting. Maybe you won't use that concept, and it is something completely different, all the more power to you!

All I'm saying is that the idea is simple and will be fun to read — if — you don't just turn it into "replace every word that has Guardian in it with Pure Ones" kind of story.

I just can't stress it enough, and it's not because I don't like your work or anything. I just don't want to see a good idea wasted. Just keep it interesting, and I'll be happy to read it (I may even review from time to time, even, if that is what you would like).

Beyond that, I think the twist on their characters is . . . interesting. I don't have any complaints at the moment, as it is indeed AU and I would have to wait and see how their character develop. The question if they would be Pure Ones if the said organization had won the Battle of the Ice Claws is up in the air, and for the sake of it, I think it is reasonable to assume so.

Besides that, rest of the chapter was just flipped and to that degree, predictable and not worth bringing up. Hopefully, future updates don't follow this pattern, as I would love to see just how different things would be in this AU story. I think that is enough to warrant a follow, yes? As I'm interested, to say the least.

If there is anything you want to talk about or disagree with in regards to what I had said, don't be afraid to PM me. I'll most certainly be interested to see if this story can develop into something unique, but we'll have to wait and see.

With that, I wish you luck and hope you have a good day!

A very interesting story I really liked it.