Wow I really enjoyed your story Tsunade being there granddaughter was so cute but in the final what have become of the rinnegan bottle?

I loved your fic , man. I wish there was more like yours. The only sad part, is that is kinda short. Well, it's long... but I wanted more! xDDD

I finished this about an hour or so ago, and ohmygod, this is easily one of my favorite Sakura fics now! I couldn't put the whole thing down, so I was basically reduced into an unproductive potato for a whole day and a half. Hahaha, shucks!

I so loved the whole journey that I reviewed so much, wth. And I just realized that I mostly used allcaps and typos were everywhere. Lool, I was just so in love with your writing and your story!

You have a knack for describing-not too specific, not too vague, AND ABSOLUTELY BEAUTIFUL-plus, goddangit, you know exactly how to write peaceful, fluffy, sweet scenes. I adore your portrayal of Sakura and Madara, ESPECIALLY Madara.

I was so weirded out by how most of my fantasies are in here too. Do we perhaps have the same brain? Hahaha. I loved every second of reading this!

And well, since you asked for constructive criticism, I have a few comments:
-The smut portions left me underwhelmed during the climax parts. Don't get me wrong, I do love your foreplay scenes-they're so sexy! Just that in the act itself, there's something missing. Maybe more emphasis on release or urgency towards release or a different play with words altogether?
-I think some of the smut portions didn't need to be so detailed in the sense that they could have just been implied to have made love all night. Like a curtain fall type of narration.
-The ending was quite rushed, I must say. Especially considering how your chapter content for 3/4ths of the story was almost always a direct continuation of the preceding chapter. Only when Madara got chucked back to his past were there long timeskips. Then from there on, it just felt too haphazardly put together. I still love the story. Just that it felt imbalanced by this.
-I was so so irked by Madara calling Sakura "baby". Idk, is this just a personal preference? But for a man of the past who would most certainly have had a more formal or relatively archaic form of speech, Madara's usage of "baby" was odd indeed.
-The fluff can be redundant sometimes. Hmmm... or perhaps just stretches on for far too long in a particular scene.
-3/4ths of the story was buildup. I was really expecting for Sakura and Madara to tackle the problem that is Akatsuki. Especially since it directly concerned Madara.

I hope you weren't put down by my criticism. I still highly admire your work! As I've said, it has entered my favorite Sakura & MadaSaku fanfic list! I am sure to keep coming back to this, you know! Goddangit, that kiss from chappie sixteen is still so fresh and vivid in my mind! I am SO analyzing how you write your descriptions!

Love love your work! Never stop writing!

GET CHU A MAN LIKE DARTH-HEALER'S MADARA. OMGGGG, TO BE FUSSED OVER LIKE THAT, HNNNNG.

AND YOU JUST GOTTA LOVE INO. HUHU.

OHMYGOOOOOD, Ino's first appearance in this story JUST HAD ME SQUEAAALING. What a bestfriend! Shucks, I'm missing mine right now.

MAN. CAN THIS GET EVEN CLOSER TO HOME? READING SMUT OUT LOUD TO YOUR PARTNER, GAAAAH.

I love your story, did I already mention that?

I swear. I could've written this. OHMYGOOOOOD, I LOVED THAAAAT. HNNNG.

This is too cute, huhuhu. Sakura's time!

Breaking my heart, you!

Okay so I'm not sure how to feel about this chapter, because I felt Sakura's genuine concern for but then the reason she gives Madara is "there's so much I haven't done"?! Nani?!

Cute ending though.

Holy crap. HOW? That was so intense, and so sensual, and so loving that I could have sworn I've just fallen in love out of nowhere! Ohmygooooooood, that kiss is the BEST KISS I'VE EVER READ/WATCHED YET. HOLYYYYYY. HOLY! SHIT! This is sure gonna stay with ne for the rest of my life, man! GODS! It was so beautiful!

Madara's pleading was so freaking INTENSE. If I were Sakura...asdfghjkl!

PRAISE YOU FOR CREATING THIS STORY, THIS CHAPTER, THIS SCENE. I LOVE IT SO SO MUCH. IT WAS JUST SO MAGICAL!

NOOOOO, DON'T SEPARATEEEEEEE.

OH YEAHHHHH. GO, MY MADARA. PROTECT YOUR WOMAN. Gods, I absolutely loved when he said "Don't speak to her like that". Omgggg. Hnnng.

GAHHHH THE SEXUAL TENSIONN

GODS, THAT FLIRTATION IS A GIFT FROM HEAVEN ITSELF.