Think about what Toby could actually be meeting with Strickler for because realistically there's no reason for him to recount so much of what happened that Strickler already knows for the kid to figure it out. A few key words like (troll, trollhunter, Jimbo and Claire) that imply there's weird stuff happening would be better. I'n this example I'm thinking Toby's just bringing news about Jim's current situation rather than recounting the past one. Come up with your own reason why he would need to talk but don't make it pure exposition and we don't really need to know everything at first, less is more.

This is really good. I really enjoyed it. Great structure awesome story. I'd like to see a specific freshmen figure everything out and have a story follow them, but this was really interesting. And frankly hilarious, because all freshmen are clueless. I can say that because I've been there and I was clueless. And so that just makes it even better. Great job!

I wish this story would continue; I like where this is going.

That's a great story! I know it's a one-shot but I would love to see more!

Nice

A great story and I relly like the way it was written

Jim's going to be an urban legend by the time the last of the kids who actually knew him graduate.

If done right I think you could have a really great story on your hands several chapters long if you want I kind of hope you do cuz that was good

This is a really great one-shot, and it has an interesting point of view that not many people have done yet. I really enjoyed this, thank you for sharing your work of art with us!

this is awesome!