Amazing story pls update soon

Cant wait to read the what comes next! I am honestly sad that it is over for right now! :( But I cant wipe this grin off my face! Keep up the great work!

I'm guessing that they were all in different timelines before or they would have corindnated together before

Wait wait wait, I’m a little confused. In one chapter Pyrrha talks to herself about kidnapping Jaune and fight and killing every member of JNPR and RWBY, wouldn’t that make them be EXTREMELY weary of her as well? Do they not remember? Do they not care? Some of this time travel with each character is not consistent

good

I wonder when the loopers (that's I'm calling the characters who time traveled) have a convention and talk about if they know the future
Well their futures.
Also jesus here we go with crazy pyrrha

Good work hope cinder fall is in it some how to maybe even raven that would be the best

Yea I am done...all that I am reading is Jaune going from probably certifiable bad ass to retarded bitch boy Naruto friendship clone. I mean literally what is the point of this story with characters who have lived so many years and experienced so many things just to take their memories!?

Then there is the fact that I am seeing no plot development outside of another yandere harem bullshit story with a kow towing simpering submissive male. I fucking hate reading that shit anyway.

Sure that may not be what you have going on but its all I am seeing.

Love this chapter. This has some nice interactions with all the characters. Love how crazy everyone is in it. Also, love the lines in this chapter.

I especially like this line of dialogue from Nora regarding her matchmaking abilities.
"OH, is that a challenge?! He will be using her thighs as earmuffs in a month!" Nora quote

I really hope you use more lines like that.

Glad to see more of this story, I'll be waiting patiently for the next chapter
I wonder when the time travelers will tell the others, cause there are going to be to many inconsistencies that can't just be played off.

I feel like there was a lot of poor character interactions that have been happing more and more as the story develops. Every few lines a character starts questioning "how does x know this?! They're not supposed to know this?!" as they continue to scream about how Jaune has changed etc etc etc... It's gotten to a point where I'm cringing and facepalming by how dumb the characters are acting. The line of reasoning each character internally monologues is also equally ridiculous. I'll give this story a few more chapters to see if it hopefully gets better.

I’m very interested in seeing how neo, vernal, coco, and velvet interact in the story. The mixing of different timelines is an interesting direction. I’m very curious as to how it will turn out. I can only imagine how things end up with stalker Pyrrha

Oh no Pyrrha is a weird-o D:

Wonderful!

I have no idea what the fuck you're doing with your characterizations.

So many things are glossed over and vague as hell. How long did Jaune live with the Roses - How old was Jaune when he was taken by Raven? Why was he even taken? Why would he not bother to call his family (Rose, in this case) for two whole goddamned years? How the hell has NO ONE AT ALL picked up on others acting oddly. Why the hell is canon being retreaded by people who are hundreds if not thousands of years old? Everything is playing out the same so far in Beacon.

I mean, he was 9 years old when he met Summer and her family. How in the hell would Raven have the time (years) to break in Jaune and push him with Vernal (for an extra two years, mind you)

Your timeline makes no sense. Your characters actions make no sense. You forget their characterization in one scene and suddenly their different in another?

How could they only now be realizing things aren't as they seem? Holy shit, they are not acting like the nearly immortal like beings they'd be at this point. THEY ARE TRIPLE TO QUADRUPLE DIGIT IN AGE.