Dr. Honeydew is a great OC

Dr. Honeydew is a great OC

Fred and friends have made a daring escape from the clutches of Ravens camp, but will Fred reunite in time with his team? Will the whole band get back together and kick Grimm ass with their new allies? Will Fred's quest for corn dogs reach its conclusion?
I don't know! We'll have to leave that to Lieutenant-058 to decide!

This was a fun chapter to read, there wasn't any fighting but still enough action.

As for the ending, definetly confusing, but has potential. We, the readers, have no idea who or what exactly this AI is. By the looks of it, I'd say it's an AI made from Pyrrah. Honestly, not entirely sure how to feel about this but, you da author so that's up to you. My suggestion: don't make it Pyrrah 2.0, make this new character different but with some similar attributes to Pyrrah.

Until next chapter, ciao!

Ok I love honeydew and that you brought red back and kept him alive.
Can’t wait for the freelancer story going to be keeping a eye out for it.
I hope you change the story line some it makes it more your story.

Sincerely alduin

Having Scarab problems? Just call your local volunteer Carter! Best part is that it’s free of charge!... then again who the will you pay? Spartans don’t have family’s... :’(

Red is my favourite character this chapter, he’s just so nonchalant and casual about everything lol. The A.I. thing at the end is interesting, haven’t seen something like that in a while, and it’s quite obvious who the A.I is, or rather was. One last thing, John’s luck, it’s more or less just giving him the tools to stay alive and get the mission done, not helping him in the moment of battle. When you play halo, do you ever wonder why there’s conveniently a marine corpse in the middle of a hallway deep inside the Halo with a medical kit and ammo alongside a rocket launcher when you need it most? Just try Halo CE in legendary. Seriously, rockets are so useful for wraiths you can’t board lol. Anyway, thanks for the chapter! I look forwards to the next! :D

So what, did Pyrrha's mind get stuck in digital limbo due to some weird glitch when the transfer machine broke?

Ok so I missed putting a comment on the last chapter. Busey working on my own projects and having hell-a-fun in Doom Eternal. So I am going to give you a twofer.
So in the last chapter, I dont remember much aside from Tucker, Griff and Simons. OK Where is Caboose? Is he a naive WF grunt that team kills everyone?
So this chapter was pretty good. Fred and Jade got to leave Atlas with Weiss, and Red survived! Wahoo! I am a plane junkie as I am sure you could tell. So seeing some expert flying and manuvering was amazing to see.
And how Raven ambushed the transport and the two vetrans peacing together that the airfield was in enemy hands. Fred taking three days to bust them out of Ravens camp. I really like how you used some of the actuall episode in the chapter. Even if it was breifly. Then the ending with the AI. You got me woundering what is going on. Sooo, everything is good. I really got nothing else to say.
Good luck, have fun and be safe out thier with the Beverage vires going around

Pfffff-HAHAHAHAHAHA-carter maneuver... I’ve seen this joke so much but it still makes me laugh my ass off. I barely started the chapter and I’m already posting a review. Good job Author.

are your titanfall, halo, rvb storys crossover or standalone?

Love .

This story has been great. And I think doing a freelancer story would be cool.
I’m really liking the way you are including blue team into the story keep up the great work.

Sincerely alduin

Great chapter! The only thing I’ll say really, is that you should put a scene change or POV change whenever you switch scenes cause when you went from Kelly to John and Linda partway into the chapter there it confused me for a moment. Nothing big but I figured I wasn’t the only one to notice so I voiced it. Anyway, I’m looking forward to the next! :D

Could you please write something about TitanFall, also great chapter and I hope to read more soon.

Yay! Honeydew is here to stay!

Honestly, Kelly should be feared by the white fang just as much as the guards are afraid of her.
And just saying, the white fang are probably just as arrogant and full of themselves as Atlas too. I'm just happy to see her circumstance isn't as bad as the rest of blue team.

Poor John, hasn't he been beaten up enough? You'd think his good luck would counter Qrow's bad luck. Since John doesn't have a semblance for good luck it does make sense that Qrow's bad luck might be a bit more overpowering.
Plus, if John and Clovis are in the same place, I bet they would be nigh invincible.
John really just needs to rest and Linda just needs to reveal her feelings.

No matter what, the Reds and Blues will always find a way into a Halo fanfic.
Great chapter, and I will see you next time, ciao.