I really hate the Melina character, not sure if you did but at some point I was hoping Leia would turn the tides on her and pubplicly humilate her before she gets dropped into the slave pits. And if not that maybe have a chapter set after leia has kids where she shows up and tries to get leia again

I'm baffled that you have had no reviews as yet. This is the best of the very few such fics re Leia's subjugation as a slave girl that I've read. One author has poor grasp of the language and how to write and repeats himself/herself a lot, yet gets many reviews.

You need to learn to paragraph better. Remember, when a person speaks, their quote constitutes a new paragraph, usually.

You did well with Leia's preparation, although her collar would not seem in photos to be a choke collar. I'd have probably fitted her with a shock or choke collar while she was being broken to accept her new standing as a slave. That'd add to her humiliation, too, reserving the "movie" collar and leash for appearances before Jabba. Her costume, also, might be reserved for that, with her being kept nude or in brief lingerie, otherwise. I think she'd also be trained to remove clothing gracefully, in an arousing, feminine manner. A graceful, erotic, sultry, seductive, submissive, forced coquette... A princess turned slave girl.

You used "taught" once where you meant "taut." The words sound the same but are very different. But you otherwise spell well, avoiding the frequent errors of "authors" who can't distinguish between to, too, and two, or between "your" and "you're". (Rolling eyes Smilie here.)

The laser hair remover was clever, although I wondered how safe it might be to use while she was wet in the bath The depilation of her nether regions was a nice erotic touch. Women sometimes wonder if this hairless vulva means that men prefer very young girls, but I think that in most cases, it just arouses by revealing anatomical details down there. It also says to look at her there, bare to your eyes and to your touch. It is now the dominant look among models, including Playmates.

I'll continue to read. I came here in search of such a Leia fic, and yours is the best that I've seen. If you get a novel and leave it by your computer and check it to see how professional authors paragraph and use quotes, you will find it of great value. When I wrote my first fic or two, I had quote/paragraph issues, too. But I soon ironed them out, and you can, too, if you care enough.

I also wrote similar scenes of captive girls being embarrassed before rulers, and know it can be difficult to tell that aspect of the story well, especially in a time dominated by hardcore feminism and the Me Too movement. But those drawn to fics like this are hopefully fed up with PC and want the story to be realistic for a girl caught in such circumstances. To be sure, she will probably escape and achieve revenge on Jabba and his minions. But she will be humbled and made to be submissive, obedient, and delightfully erotic along the the way!

Even many straight women and lesbians as well as men are attracted by such a tale, as witness the immense following that the Fifty Shades of Grey and Story of O books and films enjoyed. You're doing well by that genre of fiction, and are articulate and mostly spell well. But sort out the other mechanics of good writing, and your work will be excellent. I suspect that you have more readers than reviews suggest. Many readers are just embarrassed to review anything so non-PC these days.

Hang in here and keep us entertained.