Reviews for Inquisitor Carrow and the Phoenix Fiasco
Guest chapter 1 . 7/24
So what would happen if carrow animated a potrait of the emperor?
sondrex76 chapter 10 . 7/23
You know, if Carrow increases earth's weapon quality too much eventually it will be able to take out his power armor, which would be bad news for him.
I mean, continued bombardment of sufficient potency or a direct nuclear detonation could do it even now, but still.
Poor Tim, no wonder he smokes.
I wonder if the emperor will resolve the situation with Carrow being lonely by making him capable of bearing children so he can have some mini astrates walking around.'
...the god emperor...reacting to someone else touching his mug...I...that's hilarious
"One even complemented me on my veins. I've never been so flattered in my life"...hahaha XD I love how magic is just being casually made more normal XD
Tim is more and more becoming liek a real Inquisitor: unreasonably paranoid, eccentric and unreasonably competent.
"ut Necromancy, Black Magic and all related Dark Arts are banned on School grounds,", oh how can this continue to be this good? I have two dozen books I haven't finished reading and I am still choosing this :)
If they have small fusion reactors they could own the energy sector, ltos of money right there. I see why money started to not be mentioned anymore.
A prophesy regarding Anathema , the emperor himself I take it. No idea who M.N and N.F is though
I love how anything the emperor touches basically becomes a holy relic that literally affects demons heavily. Effectively being the (chaos)god of order has some perks it seems.
Where did you get the idea for the Purgatas for? Is it something from some warhammer 40K book?
I am now imagining a giant gilded very noticeable tank stalking some random tug who somehow don't notice it.
So now Hermione swears by the throne..has she joined the Imperial cult?
What are these "putti"?
The vampries really should wield armro specialized against knives and such, since silver is a weakness of theirs and people generally use silver knives rather then bullets.
I were expecting the God Emperor to tel lCarrow Mars were their primary priority, I mean, if he tells him something is a priority, it would suddenly be the #1 priority.
It would be hilarious if Siruis ended up with a vampire girlfriend. of course, unless vampirism has horrific side-effects (like loss of humanity) there would then be no reason not to turn hi, so probably not
So Sirius took a transformative drug he had no idea what would do...oh my
The picture of Snape shouting for Carrow only for Carrow to appear moments later, breaking straight through the rock to save them.
hmm, so they are re-creating Carrow's servitors through perfectly mundane means...they are getting up there technologically really quickly (helped by the emperor himself).
Did Carrow and Tim find the same area and not inform each other?...yup, you did make that rather obvious with the cutting between the perspectives. Which I suppose was the point.
...They actually started hunting Centaurs?
The future is looking bleak, no surprise there, though I wonder how far into the future, Carrow seems to be pushing the schedule a bit.
So Ixion was real...whoever they were, a greek king according to google.
Rivets apparently is not good for armor, so I am a bit surprised the space marines would use them. Then again the Adeptus Mechanicus probably designed them, so...
" poor Carrow fired from his job"...she really drank the cool aid, didn't she? Good to see she has enough sense to know she does not think him to be perfect at least.
I wouldn't be surprised if Carrow thought it heretical that the Emperor had an inferior armor to his own. That might be interesting.
"Ah yes, his first challenge, normal person sized doors." XD
I wonder if the emperor's children...whatever they are called will be mentioned in this, maybe he finds a nice scientist girl and gets a child.
...I think the emperor may be accidentally increasing the strength of his religion by casually doing magic like the repair thing. It would be hilarious if it became the state religion everywhere eventually, with him trying to hide the fact that he is the God-Emperor.
I love how he technically has no power over the company, but through his contributions everyone basically acknowledges his superiority anyway.
Oh no, door of hunger, he touched it and now he is hungry...tis not good. Tis not good at all. Dumbledore you must embrace the emperor and rid yourself of this taint!
The fact that Tim gets most of his scars from training, not from missions is just...something
Him almost losing his second eye really made the whole thing about amateurs being the most dangerous in combat seem relevant.
I imagine that "wooping through them as dramatically as he could." was quite dramatic, an 11 our of 12 I am sure.
Oh, New girl :(
Oh no, his pet vampire has runes of control on her hands, she is going to turn on them aren't she? Nooo, that was sad :( I should have expected something like that to happen, this is still in the warhammer universe, things like this is the bare minimum.
"You can leave it to the professionals"...The Inquisition is the professionals when it comes to things like this.
Doest the raid mean there won't be more shapeshifter drugs? It would be entertaining if humanity started having various animal features just because of a single source of drugs XD
oh ok, so those drugs originated within Carrow's domain. That's good, I so want the future of this to have lots of humans with minor animal features and such, just for the hilarity of it. And catgirls. Can't forget about catgirls.
Are fairies in this sapient (what most people incorrectly call sentient)? Are they in Harry Potter? Apparently they are not overly bright in normal Harry potter, though the wiki does not specify if they are self-aware.
Poor Edwin and Natasha.
I like how Carrow is a space marine who is really good at painting.
I like how even mundane people can feel how potent the God Emperor's writing really is. Then again magic seems to run in their blood, so maybe not perfectly mundane after all.
That last sentence XD

I found a few potential minor misspellings and such:
1
'"Do you thi' - 'Do you thi'
" might had managed" - " might have managed"
"got nothing to ashamed" - "got nothing to be ashamed"
2
"going get a lot more" - "going to get a lot more"
"this restaurant them" - "this restaurant then"
"now had working energy w" - "now they had working energy w"
3
"was to breath" - "was to breathe"
"so much more the thing", sounds weird but may be a figure of speech I am unfamiliar with
"He couldn't breath" - "He couldn't breathe"
" poor Severus breath now" - " poor Severus breathe now"
"has had rather a shock" - "has had a rather large shock"
4
"Percy commented " - " Percy commented "
"specialise insome of the more h" - "specialise in some of the more h"
"Advance Transfiguration" could be "Advanced Transfiguration" but may also just be some weird spelling for an old book
"Changing prayers of purity" could be "Chanting prayers of purity"
"He'd know really, hadn't been able to admit to" - "He'd known really, hadn't been able to admit it to"
"would have know to ring" - "would have known to ring"
5
" Looked she was" - " Looked like she was"
"s slumped down in his seat his over-l" could be "s slumped down in his seat, his over-l" or "s slumped down in his seat with his over-l"
" a quite Christmas" - " a quiet Christmas"
" flat tyres lurked" - " flat tires lurked"
6
"her feelings loudly know" - "her feelings loudly known"
"his sword draw the" - "his sword drawn the"
7
"a few more hours sleep" - "a few more hours of sleep"
'I suppose we're trea' - '"I suppose we're trea'
"allowing itself to pulled along." - "allowing itself to be pulled along."
"Those who to live to wage war will see" - "Those who live to wage war will see" or maybe "Those who too live to wage war will see"
"who which to wage " - "who wish to wage "
"irl actually an expression for the" - "irl actually showed an expression for the"
"…take cuttings collect seeds…bri" - "…take cuttings, collect seeds…bri"
"…absolute bloody nightmare." - "…an absolute bloody nightmare."
"dragonflies to garden" - "dragonflies to his garden" or "dragonflies to the garden"
8
"Ministry ." - "Ministry."
" into a major the material " - " into a major problem as the material ", though some other change may be better
"Club now he thought about it," could be "Club now that he thought about it,"
"urse of whether a potion had " - "urse or whether a potion had "
9
"he complained to herself as he " - "he complained to himself as he "
" in seven dimension caused" - " in seven dimensions caused" or " in the seventh dimension caused"
"tripped on torn carpet and" - "tripped on a torn carpet and"
" ready to shoot it either o" - " ready to shoot if either o"
" was rapidly catching it up" could be " was rapidly catching up to it"
"quite amusing it the " - "quite amusing if the "
10
" of course now they were a" could be " of course now that they were a"
"cage he'd back into, " - "cage he'd backed into, "
"barely knew anything about," - "barely known anything about,"
"vening crowds starting pouring in" - "vening crowds started pouring in"
"enveloped in the smaller" - "enveloped the smaller"

Thanks for writing, it was a very entertaining read, I hope there will be more of this.
I hope you have an awesome day!
Zekkers chapter 10 . 7/9
I have truly enjoyed, loved, and laughed at your work through all these chapters. I'm really glad you have time to write.

As someone living in the US, under the 'leadership' of the delusional Cheeto, it must be nice to be getting back to normal... and not looking at a rising tide of ... stuff. Best of luck to you.
E.L. Girralo chapter 10 . 7/9
I do hope there are plans to continue with this series even further. I have quite enjoyed it in these harrowing times.
Guest chapter 10 . 5/30
I love this series, I really do. God bless Timothy, patron saint of forbearance. Keep up the good work!
Umbra Erebus chapter 10 . 5/26
Really loved what's been happening so far but I have some quick questions

I may have missed it but what type of space marine is Carrow?

Would we be able to get a one shot or something of when Carrow first went to the 40k and how he managed to meet his foster father? Expanding on that maybe a little bit more detail on the type of experiences he had while training to be a space marine and what he did during his time as in inquisitor.

Would Carrow ever settle down with someone? Or is it that his dedication to humanity prevents that or maybe its something to do with the religion of the god emperor.

Would Carrow ever make it back to 40k through time travel or in some other way. This I understand however might not be realistic due to the fact Carrow has made many changes to the past most importantly introducing the god emperor to runes and such so early and it may not be easy to understand how that might change the future.

Right thanks for reading my questions, I would really appreciate if you would get back to me but at same time I understand if you don't want to answer my questions.

-Erebus

Ps again love the story. It's such a strange premis and yet you pull it off so well, I have no idea how you do other then a great imagination and a keen intelligence. I know I would never be able to pull off a fraction of the skill you have.
courfanb chapter 10 . 5/26
It is always a pleasure to read a new realise of this story!
So when is the next one ?!
David chapter 10 . 5/23
I've been reading this series for quite some time now, and it's gotten me everytime a deep desire to play war hammer 40k or read a 40k novel. I cant help but re-read it from the beginning each time I come back to it. Love your writing style and I hope you're safe. Kudos!
Jack Inqu chapter 10 . 5/16
Thanks for the new chapter; sorry I don't have anything more to say.

Take care, good luck, stay safe, stay healthy, and I look forward to your next update.
Mike924 chapter 2 . 5/14
Carrie, you are a fucking hypocrite
ViduraNim chapter 10 . 5/12
Amazing chapter as usual. Wish there are more stuff to do with god emperor and Carrow, my favourite parts. Please keep writing. Thank you for this amazing stories.
ardvarkeating101 chapter 10 . 5/11
I’m missed this fic like a goddamn limb.

More please!
marduk-report chapter 10 . 5/11
Glad to see the Dark Lady finally run to ground. I can imagine the comeuppance she'll be getting.

Good chapter as always; I'm very much interested in seeing how the group recover and progress beyond the damage they've been caused in recent chapters.

And the wizardinv world too for that matter.
Imraphel chapter 10 . 5/11
Ah. More Carrow. And now he's back in full health things are about to get interesting again. I hope those cultists, whoever they are, like living in interesting times...
drucifer000 chapter 10 . 5/10
This story is so amazing. Honestly I was a little let down when Fudge said "use everything you have" and then Carrow didn't bring his tank to chase down the dark lady ha. Still absolutely loved it, hope we don't have to wait to long for the next chapter!
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