chapter 9... theres no way this is not a kaguya sama reference

I hope your ok dude.

Any chance of an update?

I want cereal with milf instead of milk

Update ya cunth

Lovely

I want to find out that dark secret shib

God this is beautiful. Please update

ya know, it's funny...but this jaune seems to have powers like the God of destruction, but Cannon Jaune has powers similar to the God of light , what with his semblance looking like the pool from the GoL's tree/ sanctuary.

All right, you started out with an interesting premise and managed to draw it out into an interesting story! I adore Ruby so I totally support that pairing, and some of the background ships have my attention as well. You've nailed the character interactions and managed to include enough diversity in the cast to keep things interesting. Don't get me wrong, this story is amazing and you should absolutely continue it. But. If you want this review to end without criticism, I would stop reading now.

Your premise of giving your main character an out-of-control penchant for destruction is an interesting one, regardless of it having been used before. However, I do believe you gave Jaune control too easily. The capacity for specific, targeted, absolute destruction is too overpowered for any character to have and still maintain any semblance of difficulty. Brandon Sanderson sidestepped this by making Alcatraz work hard to keep a leash on his Talent, and made it so that any time he successfully used it, it had some sort of unseen side-effect. He tries to free his friend by channeling the power through a pillar, it works, they walk away, they hear the pillars shatter in the distance.

Not to mention the fact that you haven't actually set any limits on Jaune's power-what's to stop him from breaking someone's mind in order to bend them to his will, or breaking the sound barrier as a form of attack? If he can do these things, why hasn't he? Yes, I get that his morals wouldn't allow it, but you've never stated that in your story.

I would suggest lampshading this in the form of an introspective dialogue, possibly when someone suggests these things to him. Cinder, perhaps, or Roman. Out loud he tells them that his Semblance can't do those things, but inside he begins to wonder. Run wild with it, use the opportunity to give him some much-needed character development.

And finally, I would suggest fixing his control problem. Yes, it seems cool to give him absolute control of his Semblance after a nice chat, but it just doesn't work in the context of your story. The entire premise of this fanfic is that Jaune can't control his Semblance. You introduce the conflict in the first chapter, drive the point home in the second, and continue to point out how much Jaune struggles at every turn.
Then you just throw that all away in a random act of god. Just... poof. All of that conflict, all that character development, gone. You're changing Jaune's entire character to the point I would swear he's an entirely different person. That kind of change doesn't happen overnight, it happens over the course of months or years.

Unless, I suppose, when he broke his Semblance... he actually broke himself.
So. Here's my suggestion, offered merely as a hypothetical solution. It's your story, do as you please.
Jaune starts losing his Semblance. He actually broke his own Aura in his stupid stunt, and it's been slowly draining away ever since. He has so much of it that he doesn't even notice for a few chapters, but after his Semblance starts losing power, he's faced with a choice. Give up the Hunter life forever, leaving his Semblance to die... or try to use it again in order to reverse the damage.
That premise alone is enough to offer another few chapters of conflict.

It's up to you, really. It's your story and no two people write the same way. You've done an excellent job so far, so I'm hardly complaining. I'm just pointing out a few flaws I saw and discussing what I would do to fix them. I don't mean to cause any offense, merely to offer some constructive criticism on an already amazing piece. My apologies for the long review clogging up your screen, but I hope something I've said helps you find new ideas for this story.

Have a lovely rest of your day!
-Mister Grin.

Alcatraz Versus the Evil Librarians much? Honestly, you just need Grandpa Smedry and you'll have ripped the entire first scene straight from the book.

Not that I mind in the least... I've been waiting for someone to use that wonderful work of literature in a different fandom.

Nice first chapter!

Ahem ahem, ruby secretly manipulator?!

Holy shit. This hurt to read.

Why do I get the feeling that CoCoa may have noticed the way that Ruby and Jaune look at each other and gave Ruby some advice and that is what Ruby was blushing about?

I’m really liking your story so far even if your writing style is a little... weird. I hope you continue writing this as the plot is rather intriguing.

nah man you need to make chapters longer I need more things to read other than that great chapter hoping you can show more people's emotions especially around jaune and his semblance also feel like you should make him do some accidental hero work if you know what I mean like he accidentally stumbles on the White Fang or even torchwick I think it would be funny but that's just me anyways keep up the good work and I can't wait for next chapter