Thx for the update

good chapter

Great chapter can't wait for the next update.

This story is awesome. It does such an amazing job of portraying the way the Jedi should be not power hungry and telling people what to do but teaching and showing them instead it’s fucking awesome

Like it. Wonder how it would change Anakin falling to the dark side.

why would Maul attack in broad daylight in the middle of an arena filled with thousands of people? the Sith are in HIDING this is the OPPOSITE of hiding this is whipping out your dick and helicoptering it in their faces. really? he was suprised by a droid? and was occupied by it long enough for Laxis (why the fuck is he called Laxis) to grab Padme get into the pod start it up and drive off AND discover Force Pull and successfully pull the droid to him all before a HIGHLY trained Sith Assassin can destroy 1 fucking MAINTENACE DROID? and where's Qui Gon? what is he doing in all this? you went for a big flashy scene with no thought as to "does this make sense?" "would this character do this?" not trying to flame but seriously think these things through

Padme should have no idea that Maul was Sith. at this point most people wouldn't even know the word or what it meant, by the time of A New Hope most of the galaxy believed Jedi to be made up and that was 20 years after R.O.T.S, T.P.M was the first time in 1000 years the Sith were encountered the galaxy has forgotten so having Padme not only know what a Sith is but identify her attacker as one is impossible and ridiculous,

why would the Trade Federation put a bounty on Padme? the whole point was for Naboo to be invaded and Padme to escape and then tell the Senate what was happening to force Valorum out and Palpatine in, setting a bounty completely destroys that, the Jedi would never have gone in force to Naboo, Hyperspace lock? what the fuck is that supposed to be?

why the hell would Padme know anything about the Gungans Sacred Place? the Gungans and Naboo have been seperate since forever Padme would not know the Gungans HAVE a sacred place let alone where it is, overall the story is solid but you're problem is your characters know things that they couldn't know but do because you do so you've made them know it too, you need to re-write this story to patch up the plot holes,

I wish you just replaced anakin with laxus and make an older!Anakin story

I want Lax to be badass sith lightning user just like Kirin begone with the thunderclap

Oooo I liked this chapter, glad to see you’re in a place where you are writing again. Can’t wait to see Lax and Padmé reunited :)

Keep up the great work

nice chapter

Interesting start, nice to see what you change.

An enjoyable adventure. Little confused why Lax is a separate character rather than just Older!Anakin. Otherwise good.

Nice to see Padme being more proactive. Of corse there are potatoes that demonstrate more agency than the original.