Your Feedback/Grading for Assignment #5

Examiner: Lizzy

Grade: 20/20 - O (Outstanding)

Feedback: "You did a great job writing Rionach and bringing her to life with the limited details we have of her. I could sympathize with her attempts to protect her life and her daughter even if it meant giving up her only relative. I think her reaction to the premonition was believeable, and intereactions with Gormlaith justified. I haven't read anything like this before, so well done for originality. Even broken into a few short scenes, I think the story flowed really well and didn't feel jarring. Prompt was perfectly used, I knew exactly who I was reading about. I'm not sure if the premonition was part of the Sayre lore (I'm a little rusty on my Ilvermorny trivia) or if you came up with it for this, but either way I thought it was a good decision to show it here and use it to fuel Rionach's actions. I thoroughly enjoyed seeing this little snippet of these rare characters. Perfect spag and extra criteria met, well done. :)"

Your story is very interesting, captivating. You drew me in and not sure how I am out. I loved it!
I think the premise has potential of an mc.
Thank you !