Hey it's me again! So far, my advice is still the same. Find a beta reader. And work on your grammar. Your plot is more than good enough to be enjoyable. Your pacing has been progressing well to the point where it feels like it wasn't rushed too much. That's it for now. And good job for this story all in all.

This is kind of interesting. I'll keep in reading for now but here's my advice for you. Look for a beta reader. Slow down the pace of the story because it's a little bit fast. That's all for now.

Interesting. Not a lot of enjoyable OC's in Akame ga Kill, so that's a win in my book.

Gotta say, I really like the story so far. It is well written, makes sense, and your OC it's just perfect. I'm tired of ready about assassins with perfect morals and awesome skills that make everybody else redundant, as if their only utility was gaping at anything the character does without contributing to anything.

Also, I like how you portrayed Shelee. She seems a little OC for me, but that's not a bad thing. I like how she interacts with Jason, and I can't wait to see how their relationship progresses from here.

I hope you'll update soon!