I can't. I can't stand the homonym grammar mistakes amd it bugs me.

Interesting story, be nice if this more mature jaune will shine more in his strategy and mindset... Based on his ability to lead and coordinate rather than just brute strength... I do wonder if there is some trauma or backstory why he only uses magic n not weapon... Maybe swearing to not use it anymore or cause one of his adopted sibling praise him for it after his bad past... Be interesting to also know why he never won number 1, the eternal loser stick is interesting but be fun to see why he truly never won rathe than just not being good enough... I think it's more to him holding himself back to not hurt the people too much or limiting himself to certain style in tournaments to not sullt the arc name or for a promise and be interesting if he realise what he is actually feeling for pryhha is love if u willing to take it to that direction cause seriously good arkos is lacking especially recently and long ones... I also hopplenty of Jnpr dynamic and family moments cause its seriously cute and lovely haha... Maybe the 8 become like a guild kind of thing but whenever rwby doing cannon stuff jaune is out with team jnpr doing other mission n at times he undertake darker mission for ozpin to keep their hands clean haha... I just don't want cliche where Blake the kinda hypocrite person in series by doing what she say she doesn't want people to do aka force her view on stuff no matter what and kinda feel like a first world brat lashing out most of the time and demanding her definition of equality n fight to be the correct way... And when she fak up she ran and her way of correcting it is destroying it or again forcing her view and refusing to see reality... Not a bad character like all of them such nora and ren but again underutilised... Just like nora the one who smile and blow like the wind and shine bright like lighting for her partner while hiding the dark storm in her... Or her partner who tries to bloom a single lotus despite the harrowing storm and the darkness he is in... Or one who suppose to had it all, talent fame and money but never have the interaction she so crave... So much unexplore aspects and development... After all being alone is truly the scariest of them all n team jnpr is a literally basked for this

I really like this story so far and the humor is very good. I'm not sure what style of "wizard" you are going for with Jaune but if you are doing high fantasy he is very weak, but if you are doing a DnD style i think its pretty solid though i don't know how you will have him improve if he has to use his aura as "mana" and haven't set a precedent for him making spells more efficient with practice.

Also the "eternally 2nd place" feels a little contrived and is fairly statistically impossible if he was participating in every tournament he could like you wrote. I can see if he only ran into Pyrrah each time but otherwise came off a little forced.

I'm curious what you are doing with abolishing forced teams because with their cannon personalities the cast just falls apart without teams. Weiss may try to befriend Pyrrah and in this AU Jaune but would try to actively stay away from Jaune. Blake would just go off by herself,and certainly stay far away from Weiss. Ren and Nora would just go do their own thing. I feel you are making things unnecessarily hard on yourself by having to somehow justify the cast coming together for cannon plot. Like why would Blake argue with Weiss instead of just going back to her dorm? And if he did go to the docks there's no team RWBY to follow. The entirety of vol1-2 is fueled by Blake's forced ties to her team which don't exist here.

Anywho keep up the story its an enjoyable read and good luck on making the plot work and feel organic.

OH! You call them a Revenant! Nice to see this concept utilized by other writers as well. Nice chapter.

Dude, awesome chapter and preview, i need more XD

So Blake just outed herself as a faunus in front of them

I am so looking forward to what happens next. Very well written.

great cliffhanger. can't wait for the next chapter

I've haven't even read this story yet but I need to reply to garoorar comment lol. the nuckelavee was not small lol it was effectively a mounted cavalryman in size. now if you're looking for small and powerful id consider a Geist. possess something tiny when playing it low key, posses random environment crap as needed to flex.

Welcome back, stay safe. Sadly, the only thing I can think of that is fast, strong and small for a grimm is the Nuckelavee, but that thing is all the way in Mistral IIRC...

OH COME ON, A VERY INTERESTING FANFIC AND NOW THIS.

Nope

noice.

boooh why does it have to be underpowered!Your first attempt was great...

I mean, it's initiation but with Magical Trevor. Not really much else.