It's so good Casper High and Amity Park in general are starting to become better without any injustiee, bullying, blackmail, etc. Though I'm still a bit worried that Danny's being ingored by his own parents. Fortunately Jazz, their aunt and friends care about him and vice versa.

I don’t care that this is suppose to be a prologue or a first chapter if you can read everything in one screen viewing after getting past the adds, then it is way to short regardless what you want to call it.

Jack & Maddie acted very mean towards Danny, Jazz and even their friends. But Star's martial arts ability surprised me in a good way. Who were those ghosts who possessed Jack & Maddie anyway? Why did they do it? Are they working for somebody or do they just like doing mischief and bring pain & misery to their victims? What's going on in the G.Z. that no other ghost has appeared?
No wonder Danny is afraid something bad might happen, but he can't defeat it alone when he's got a loving girlfriend, supportive older sister and best friends who are always by his side and vice versa. As for Lancer and tye A-listers, their punishment is cruel, but very fair. Hopefully it teaches them a lesson to never be monsters they were before they got their jist desserts or else they'll be criminals forever and be stuck in prison for eternity. But why prison instead of juvie if may I ask of curiosity?

Man, I always knew Dash was a knucklehead, but once again he's shown he's a disgusting, sexist and rude pervert who deserves no girlfriend! Danny did very good when he protected Jazz from that jock creep. And it's also good that Pointdexter didn't show up and he'd better not appear, because he's absolutely the worst bully hunter I've EVER seen, really! I mean what he did to Danny originally is unforgivable! Though I know he had a horrible past, it's still no perfect excuse for him to be a bully himself to the weak, while blindly protecting the A-listers! Sam's parents are still bad too, especially Pamela the hypocrite. No wonder Watchmojo put her in their top 10 worst cartoon moms. I'm disappointed in not only the Mansons, but also Jack and Maddie for not by their children's side when they need their care and help. When are Danny and the gang gonna run away from Amity Park if things get worse?
Will Dani return and be alright?
How Val will react if she joins Team Phantom and discovers her old crush's secret?
I'm waiting very patiently for more surprises and answers that'll appear in the next chapters, so good luck!

I didn't expect to see the police at school, but Lancer and Teelaf's favoritism towards the A-listest instead of equality at school really sucks. They should't be teacher at all! Danny and Jazz did good they stoop up to their parents. Hopefully they'll move out from them or run away in the next chapters. Couldn't Valerie jpin Team Phantom earlier? She's Star's best friend, so it would be nice if she quited her hatred towards Phantom and work for Vlad and join our heroes instead.

Danny and Star really have that chemistry which blossoms like flowers in the garden of love. Though I'm surprised they are secretely writers. As always, I'm waiting latiently for more surprises. See You next time!

What happens once he becomes King? He will have a lot of work to do to bring the ghost zone to order.

I'm surprised Danny's aunt had figured out Danny's secret, but I'm relieved she acts like a true, good aunt should. Why can't she adopt both Danny and Jazz since their parents don't act like true & responsible parents should? I know, it sounds weird, but I'm just trying to give a suggestion. I still hope our heroes can stop the bullying problem in Amity and anywhere else, because of that kind of injustice keeps going on, it's not tolerative in my very honest opinion.

Oh, my God! Ms. Ishiyama was blackmailed and so were thebother adults in Amity? That's beyond sick of the A'-listers! Very,very sick that makes me hurl hard! I also hoped Maddie and Jack were going to act like true parents to both Jazz and Danny, but no, they act like the worst parents here! For me parents who pay favoritism to only one child instead of loving all of their kids equally aren't parents in my eyes, but heartless and mindless beasts! Does that mean Danny had found his adopted family in the Ghost Zone?
I hope he and Star are still gonna stick together as a couple no matter what, right? I'm patiently waiting for more surprises and answers.

Lancer wasn't one of my favorite cartoon tra hers anyway. A true teacher reacts to bullying and protects its victims the best they can and punishes those who torment them, not backwards! And the A-listers' innocent act full of lies just makes me SICK! I really hope our heroes will win this, because giving up is never a good option. What does the Headmistress Ishiyama think of this? She seeems like a character who's barely developted, so why not just make her act like a true and fair headmistress of school? And why don't the parents of our heroes and othee victims of bullying join in as well? The more people come in and help fighting for what's right, the better.

This story just feels a bit off, probably, in my opinion, because the pace of this story is a bit quick. It is more like a summery than a story. If you wish to improve your writing then that is something you may wish to look at.

But, it may be that you are very happy with your writing, and you have reason to be. It takes a lot of courage to publish a story, and I applaud you for that! If you are happy with this story, then don’t bother to change anything. I just thought that I would give you the advise, take it or leave it.

Sorry if I am being a bit mean here but I love helping people reach their potential, and I feel like this little tip could help you do just that. Have a wonderful day!

This plan must work and I just know it. To me protests for justice, freedom and anything good are always the best and I support them.

great story is their going a next part to it

Man, I feel sorry for everyone in Amity who has trouble with the A-listers. But Star proves she's not stupid and I love how she wants to take them down not with brawn, but with the brains. Too bad the producers originally didn't developt her, but hey, what are fanfics for, right?
Too bad Sam's being hateful and suspicious of Danny's new girlfriend, but maybe she'll fall in love with someone else and move on with her old crush?
All in all I wish our heroes good luck at bringing justice to the whole Amity Park, because crimes like bullying mixed with lying, manipulations and blackmail is very, very unacceptacble and it doesn't pay!

I can't wait to see Star's possitive change, as well as her an dDanny's moments which will slowly blossom like the flower of love.