That was amazing! I've never read such a good first-post before! Honestly, it felt like reading a real book! It isn't flawless, although I do see a lot of potential here! I'd love to read more of your work in the future, this is great!

I thought I might return the favor :)
Okay. This isn't perfect, but considering it is your first fanfiction, that is understandable. Actually for a first effort, this is very impressive. It feels like an episode to an animated series about Super Mario 3d World. I had beaten the game before, so I could see paralells between this and the final level. I also liked how you named the princesses.
So, you've got potential. If you choose to write more, I will definitely read it.

This was such a cute story! 3D World is such a fun game. I beat it as Peach first and them went back with everyone else! I love the names you gave to the Sprixie Princesses.

Great story Amethyst! You are a great author. I had a few good laughs in this story. One of them was
"I wanted to use that for Mario Kart!"
The one that made me fall on the floor laughing, was
"ITS NOT A COLLAR, ITS A ROYAL NECKLACE!"
I hope to see more stories soon!

Best Of Luck,
Lapis

I'm so so so proud of you! I know you've been iffy at times about posting things, but I will not shy away from saying that your first story up on the site is fantastic! A couple little grammar and verb tense slip-ups every now and again, but that aside, it was an extremely entertaining read! As you know (we are cousins btw to any passerby who is curious), I have not played Super Mario 3D world so I don't know how it originally went, but I loved this all the same!
Great action, funny dialogue, wonderful descriptions, overall, AMAZING!
Again, I'm proud of you and hope your confidence in writing only grows from here on out!
Incredible :D