Reviews for A Drunken and Expelled Knightshade Marriage
TheDragon2000 chapter 9 . 8/27
I liked this story a lot more than I thought I would. I look forward to the rest. Thanks for sharing and update soon!
hobo54333 chapter 8 . 8/21
is this going to continue it is a damn good story
NeonFC4 chapter 8 . 8/20
MOAR PLS...
PLS CONTINUE...
NoOneImprtant chapter 9 . 8/18
You should continue, as I wouldn’t like to see what he’ll jaune will bring down on atlas and beacon
Jack Redhawke chapter 9 . 8/12
Mooorrrees I neeed morrrreeees!
WearyCurmudgeon chapter 9 . 8/10
- Talk
Nicely done, also as to why Darkos wouldn't work for him. Bit of a pity, but what is is.

As he himself also said in a slightly different way.

- Charges
Well, that's a big load of nothing as he only represents the Kingdom of Atlas and as such doesn't have the jurisdiction to make proclamations for the other nations.

Which makes it clear that this is just scaremongering and a power grab.

- Fight
While the OP angle would further the whole Goodwitch goofed by expelling them angle.

It doesn't change the fact that from a tactical POV, Jaune is in a pinch, especially as Goodwitch would help out the Atlesians.

Doesn't matter how OP you are. Marrow and Goodwitch's Semblances combined are an utter PITA, combine that with Harriet's speed (thus possibly going for a hostage angle on his daughters or Blake) as well as Ironwood there. Plus possible aerial bombardment by the sky ship.

Then toss in Blake being pregnant. Yeah from a tactical side, Jaune wouldn't be able to do it on his own with his skill set, no matter how strong he is.

(Even with the varying plot bunny Jaune's of my own, only two would be able to pull that off and both are magic based. One has Nasuverse Servants at his disposal, the other has a Sacred Gear containing one of Malygos' daughters from the Warcraft setting. So that means both Arcane and Frost based magic. Everyone else would need help.)

At the least your Jaune would need Pyrrha's help, if only to counter Goodwitch. Possibly Ruby to offset Harriet, as that would leave Jaune vs. Marrow and Ironwood. Which while a very tough fight, he should be able to pull off with his current skill set.

Course Nora and Ren harassing Marrow, so it's an Ironwood vs. Jaune fight would be more ideal.

Still it would mean getting blacklisted by Atlas for their actions (at the least). Then again, fairly sure that Menagerie would welcome an experienced Huntsmen Team of NPR and Ruby, irrespective of them being humans.

As it would mean clearing out more of the island from the Grimm for inhabitation. Even more so, if Jaune can keep Kuo Kuana inviolate from them as a safe operating base.

Course if it does get driven that far, than I'm rather expecting Ozzie to off Glynda for all that her bungling has cost him. As well as tearing Ironwood a new *sshole for going along with her.

Plus, there's the Arcs reaction to all of this and the threats to their grandkids (both born and unborn).

*shrugs*

Either way, time to bug out for Jaune's family.

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Corrections:
* ... Jaune in this case, she also understood that Jaune would never leave for somebody else, ...*

"... leave them for ..."
Or: "... leave her for ..."

Favour the first option more.

*He signaled her to sit down on one while ...*

Comma after "one".

*I don't know why my transcripts have been discovered.*

"were" not "have".

*... was an accident at the beginning out of which we made the best. ...*

I'd tweak that, due to clunkiness, into:
"... was an accident at the beginning, but which we made the best of regardless."

*I only regret that you suffer now due to you loving me,"*

"... you're suffering now, due to loving me romantically."

*... he said with sad eyes while rubbing ...*

Comma after "eyes".

*And maybe if the circumstances it would have come like that.*

"And maybe if the circumstances had been different, than it would have come to pass like that.

*It has a white and dark blue-collar, ...*

"It had a white and dark blue collar, .. "

*... as he and the other two gave him an onceover before ...*

"once over", two words.
Luine Mercury LWG chapter 9 . 8/8
Now that I think about it, I haven't read a fic in the last month or two that paints Goodwitch in a good light or as an even remotely likeable or actually good person as a character. Doesn't bother me, I'm not particularly fond of her in canon, but it's interesting.
Can't wait for the next chapter.
Guest chapter 9 . 7/31
When's the next update?
RyanMK666 chapter 8 . 7/27
Also wouldn't mind a naruto or Harry Potter crossover, but i'd also be content if it stayed how it is right now.
Again keep it up.
~Ryan
RyanMK666 chapter 9 . 7/27
You're seriously going to leave us with that?! God damn I hate you! Whelp atlas is totally screwed when he fights back.
Great story, keep it up.
~Ryan
zeldawolffang chapter 9 . 7/22
This story is perfect but holy shit Ironwood has pissed me off to a new level i need to see what happens next
Fiction Philosopher chapter 9 . 7/18
Good to see you back Raizor, alive and well :)
As always, terrific work with the chapter, well worth the wait, even with how kinda short it was.
For Jaune’s status... Well, whatever you feel works, though I certainly have no complaints in making him as strong as possible, especially with the potential future prospects he and Blake may face, really reassuring us that he can handle anything that may threaten his family... So, I'm all for OP Jaune if that is what you'll go for (besides, the standards for OP-ness are basically completely arbitrary anyway, so as long as it doesn't completely break the world, it doesn't truly matter how strong you make Jaune, just as long as you keep the story interesting in your own way. No limit to the way you can do things but your imagination after all.)
So yea: Perfectly okay with OP Jaune, can't wait to see him handle the Special Ops and the Tinman, good to see your work again, thank you, and have a good one.
T-MikeyD chapter 9 . 7/15
OP the hell out of him. He curb stomped Yang, so why should a few "normal" soldiers be any different. And dear God's, Glynda gonna get an ass chewing. Can't wait for the next installment
AzraelVoorhees chapter 9 . 7/13
Damn... keep it up man, I can't wait for the next chapter.
darkparterx.999 chapter 9 . 7/13
Jesus this roller coaster is causing me to want more
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