Write some verbal diologue for your main character. There is little indication when he's speaking or thinking accept when others repond.

Can you make another version with dan machi as a base?
It must be interesting story...

i like this story

Good shit here but zombie man is pretty boring to me.

Good Work...! 1

Nice story. Thanks. You re doing good. The relationship between your hero and the amazon is fun. Continue

Wow, ya know once you made your Amazonian fetish I found it a bit strange of the suddenness quite early In the story. Once a thought to be a joke became a serious situation in this chapter. And it’s all creepy and weird for it. Because of the ducking pacing of this story. For the love of all that is in vain put a romance tag if your going with your desires in this story. Friendship is interpreted as that, friendship. No couple or kissing in friends, especially as the focus of this story. I wouldn’t mind it if it was later! Like way later, you gotta pace these things or else it will look forced! Not to mention Why are his thoughts and his dialogue the same? if he’s speak put quotation marks, please! I become confused when he talks with another character!

i thought this was dead, nice to find its not.

Nice chapter

Still amazing as always keep up the great work!

You had a great potential. I genuinely liked this story but the wimpy attitude of him just rubs the wrong way. Still best of luck for your story

rip and tear until it is done

dude pls update

Add memes and good

Magical version of Deadpool just add super healing factor and dump three quarters teaspoon of primal chaos into his head add

For the love of god, update this shit. It's too goddamn good