Well Daphne is Married or an Adult? Mrs. Ms Miss

I do wonder why Daphne never got a letter from the Ministry considering she did healing spells on a Muggle. Technically all of three students should have gotten a letter 2 of them being a letter of warning for first strike.

really "man u" ughhhhh done following and reading this story. gooooooo spurs

Going to tell you right now, we’re off to a rough start. First sentence begins “watched as he saw”...
I immediately thought, “looking where he watched, he saw the sight he was seeing.”

This harry is shy but angry, meek and weak but has explosive episodes of anger toward others.
His character is making little sense or he's bipolar...?

please update soon I love this story.

Apparently Harry has never heard a doorbell. And he continues to act like a little baby.

When was the last time you read the books? Harry has never acted this way. And it's not like this is the first time he's eaten at someone else's house. He's been to the Weasley house plenty of times by now. His personality is much more... wannabe heroic sassy. Not battered toddler.

The awkward attempts at flirty are very discordant with the hyper dramatic infantile panicking and casually throwing out "I'm super abused :)" constantly

Man, Harry is a fucking infant in this story. He's 14, not 10. He's acting more childishly than he ever did even in first year. He's also super rude and melodramatic.

Love it so far and seriously hope you will start updating it again someday soon

I’ve read a lot of HP fanfics ..I’m ashamed to say how many but this is one of the best. Quicker updates if possible so people do t lose interest I coming back. But kudos. You’re are good writer and the character development was great. But with praise I have to give one complaint: Harry is 80% too moody, take it down to 40-50% lol. Daphne deserves better.

nice

Also, read up on your spells. 'Reducto' isn't a cutting curse, it is a reduction curse taking things down to dust .

Ah! Big problem this chapter. No handguns allowed in Britain AT ALL except serving on-duty military, on-duty authorised Police Officers. Very very strict laws on gun control in Britain. Also, British streets are just not long enough to have house numbers in the thousands. I was a police officer for 30yrs and the highest number I ever came across was 600- odd. Sorry. Liking the story though.

Its becoming more and more like a story about 'The boy who Cried'

I HIGHLY suggest getting a beta. This story could be really good if it was properly edited and the pacing adjusted. It’s still good, make no mistake, but without proper pacing and revision/editing, it won’t be able to from ‘good’ to ‘really good’