Reviews for The Spider of Gotham |
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Bountyhunter1977 chapter 1 . 11/5/2019 Like the Idea but reading dialog from 2 or more people in a single paragraph can get confusing , mite need to edit that. also if there a time skip then there needs to be some indexation before the next section is read. what media in the DC universe does this take place? |
Ubermorph1000 chapter 6 . 11/5/2019 While your story is interesting, you need to fix the dialogue. It's confusing when two characters are talking sometimes: Original: Peter sighed as he nodded to himself. "How long until you run out of power Karen?" Peter asked curiously as the AI precisely answered, "One month, two days, three hours, and fourteen minutes, Peter." Peter laughed and continued to ask questions, "And then I'll need to somehow find a replacement battery source to keep you running Karen?" Karen agreed, "Correct, Peter." Peter sighed and asked another question, "How much webbing do I have? I've been using quite a bit." Karen promptly responded, "Webbing fluid level is at fifty three percent. Once empty, you will need to refill the storage compartment as well with the required chemicals, to keep using your webs." Edit: Peter sighed as he nodded to himself. "How long until you run out of power Karen?" Peter asked curiously. the AI precisely answered, "One month, two days, three hours, and fourteen minutes, Peter." Peter laughed and continued to ask questions, "And then I'll need to somehow find a replacement battery source to keep you running Karen?" Karen agreed, "Correct, Peter." Peter sighed and asked another question, "How much webbing do I have? I've been using quite a bit." Karen promptly responded, "Webbing fluid level is at fifty three percent. Once empty, you will need to refill the storage compartment as well with the required chemicals, to keep using your webs." |
Lifelessman chapter 6 . 10/26/2019 Good Work...! 6 |
Lifelessman chapter 5 . 10/26/2019 Good Work...! 5 |
Lifelessman chapter 4 . 10/26/2019 Good Work...! 4 |
Lifelessman chapter 3 . 10/26/2019 Good Work...! 3 |
Lifelessman chapter 2 . 10/26/2019 Good Work...! 2 |
Lifelessman chapter 1 . 10/26/2019 Good Work...! 1 |
Guest chapter 6 . 10/18/2019 Supergirl |
gaming-is-served chapter 5 . 10/14/2019 yay new chapter |
Death Fury chapter 4 . 10/12/2019 good job |
CRUDEN chapter 4 . 10/11/2019 Interesting, very interesting |
gaming-is-served chapter 4 . 10/11/2019 great chapter |
solidsnake45 chapter 4 . 10/11/2019 keep going quite invested in this story |
RobbyTheWolf chapter 3 . 10/11/2019 I was wondering what happened to the story. Did you delete it by accident |