This feels more like a long prequel then an actual story. Its very good still but I would have loved to see more of the Knights in combat.

I really liked this. Not as much as the main story plot wise, but damn if it's not finely written!

Will i liked your fic even if it was many things to ooc for this universe , this one shot is way to ooc even for you . A tithe at 1000 years plus the fact that imperial guardsmen were treated like meat shields and hold in such poor condition with the lack of even basic hygiene is to hard to believe even for wh40k universe . Comisars were known to shot officer for incompetence and wasting the life of there soldiers so your description is stupid . Also worlds under munitorum need to raise soldiers only in the direst of causes and they will send pdf soldiers not untrained civilians .
So a 2 out of 10 for this chapter .

Can’t wait to see the next part of this story. Question though? I assume the faceless legion have their own imperial navy right? And I imagine the Dark An il have a significant navy as well. But what about House Valor? At the least I’d expect them to have a navy similar to an Astartes chapter? You know, a few ships specifically designed to accommodate the knights and haul them to their battlefields along with a few escorts and heavier navy ships for Defense? Then a small navy to defend their home world and act as an early warning for their allies. I mean by the next story they’ll have around a legion of knights to ferry around, and a legion is usually something like 5000 to 10000 strong but since it’s 40k that number could be bigger. I also imagine they may have some new knight classes they can use. Also couldn’t it be possible for the forgeworld to have its own Titan legion? If they didn’t have a titan stc of their own I imagine they could have developed titans from the imperial knights as they’re basically one man piloted, smaller titans.

To many mistakes in this chapter . Dont rush a chapter just for some term . Take your time and prof read it .

I really enjoyed this! Looking forward to reading the next generation! Keep up the great writing! Thank you for transporting me to another world, for taking my mind off of the usual day to day routine and giving me an exciting, adventurous vacation as I read your story!

this shit sucks dude

I must agree, it rankles me but very few people would put others infront of their own ambitions, expecially in wh40k. But at least give the bitch what she deserves eventually.

What a great way to make me hate a character. At least I hope. My justice boner, please sir this can't stand. I get its supposed to be cunning and fuck yeah it is. But me personally I can't stand false rape shit. "Uh welcome to life sweetheart."

Yeah adds character so I can't fault it really. It just eh not something I personally enjoy.

Getting offended at fiction I know. Still doesn't change the grimy car salesmen feeling. Which if that's what you're going for, bravo.

What else is he going for dumbass. What's the point of reviewing this? Especially for such a stupid reason. Also Dudes already done I'm not gonna go."Wow can't wait for more!"

I mean it's a nice gesture I guess. Though I hope one review isn't what's keeping you going. I get that if a lot of people say your shits good you gotta keep going. But if you're doing it for that reason alone, just take a shower and think a bit.

This tangent isn't directed at ThatAuthorA, but just people in general.

Sincerely, zoomer complains about his own moral compass.

Is that a JoJo reference?

Can’t wait for the next one hope this fic is a long one you have some awesome writing skills keep it up it’s awesome!