Glad you have updated this

But I think you jumping plot points a lot of times

No scene of Shino and Yuuto discussing after the finding out the identities, or that previous mentioned scenes of the kiss stolen while at the apartment complex.

You are a good writer, but remember the balance of showing & telling the story

I see the Great Lord and Master Reki Kawahara has blessed Author-chan with most devestating powers of writting. I am glad Author-sama is felling better now he is not a donut. As always I look ever forward to the next thrilling installment of this wonderful fanfic

Yours truly
DeathHead8776

This chapter is shit, Spielgel doesnt die to a random crit. Ryuji doesn't appericiate Sinon's cameltoe enough and get a reality altering evalation from its sheer majesty. The fight is well done and pacing is alright I guess. When does Kirito realize he's shit at video games

Your sincere reader
DeathHead8776

Have you played around with the idea of Shino being a androphillic Type 54 pistol? I think it will add to the dynamic of the stroy and really progress her relation with Yuuto.

Your loving reader DeathHead8776

Better than all of the books I had to read for womanism and intro to gender studies. I'll give it 8 numbers out of another number of numbers.

I find it weird how Yuuto logs in to start investigating Death Gun, but decides to log out as soon as Mina shows up. Regardless, good work with the story. And don’t worry about rushing Kirito into the story. This is your world now, you call the shots.

The mystery deepens. Who the hell abriviates the luck stat to LUK instead of LUC. you damn hipster.

Pls take your time introducing Kirito. worse boy

Since there will be two people investigating Death Gun, this opens up many different possible branches. Let’s see which ones you choose. Also after the Phantom Bullet arc, are you planning on continuing your story or will it end there?

Hi
I am REALLY enjoying your fanfic. much better that what I've read before.
are you interested in doing a SAO x shadow the hegehog crossover with me?

your invested reader

You say that most of the divergence will be in the real world. Does that mean that your oc will be interacting with Shino irl? Also great chapter again. ~

0/10 No yaoi scene where Kirito has relations with a monkey.

I’m interested in how you’re going to let this story build, will it just be a copy paste remake with an oc-insert or will there be plot divergence. Good start so far.