So update, chapter two is far better, visually, but the first chapter is a giant off putter to wanting to go to the next chapter, and well I guess that's really the only problem besides normal grammar errors, but I don't really care about those.

well I'm not trying to hate but like since I'm not nitpicky enough to point out every single grammatical error, I'll just leave you with this, I haven't looked at your other chapters, but please, go back to your first chapter and put some space in the giant walls of text you have, please, it makes it harder to enjoy the story when I'm having to stare at a giant wall of text and one blink makes me lose my place.

Okay, there's a weird one in this chapter. You wrote "you must for felt", where you meant "must of felt"... but proper grammar states that "must of felt" should be "must have felt". "Must" just be lazy phonetic speech that turned "must have" into "must of"... yeah, I made that pun, what're you gonna do about it?

Correction for you, Momo's last name is "Yaoyorozu". not "Yayoruza". I suppose Japanese names are hard to remember for those of us who don't obsess over anime. Or are just unfamiliar with the language in general, outside of a few words. Here's something that might help. Yaoyorozu references Momo's Quirk "Creation". Try running the word through google translate. See what it comes out as. If need be, try running it through as "yaoyorozumomo". Either you'll get the word her last name translates into plus "peach", since Momo means "Peach" in Japanese, or you'll get something like "Thousand Blossoms". It's a bit poetic, the Japanese naming scheme. for instance, Midoriya Izuku translates roughly to "a Story of Green".

Okay, it's official. Your brain mixes up where "for" should be used, and where "of" should be used. "For" is a word that can be synonymous with "towards" or "to" someone or something. "Of", on the other hand is weird. It can be used to show that someone came from somewhere, like the book series by KA Applegate, Rowan of Rin, or it can be used to that something is certain, like the phrase "of course". It is also used in the phrase "I don't approve of this hazing".

Just going to comment quickly, since I'm using the mobile app, which seems to have the "one review per chapter" limitation removed... It's "One FOR All" and "All FOR One", not "One OF All", same with its counterpart, For, not Of. Just think of the Three Musketeers' motto, "All for one, and one for all". That's essentially where the names came from, even if they've been twisted a bit to fit the narrative of MHA.

And Welcome back Ladies and Germs to review of the Analyst Show, with your host, Zayden, the Analyst, StormVoid! Hit up that new intro:

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Whoo! That’s right I’m back with a new theme, one of my most favorite songs from one of my most favorite songs! Hope you like the new theme Pixel my man. Also sorry it took So long to update man, but I’ve had a shit storm of things on my plate. From writing my stories, getting the new flu shot, renewing my driving license, it’s just been so wild that I didn’t have time to read your latest chapter until now.

DP: Hey don’t forget about what happened with us?!

Oh yeah, Monoma broke out of the hospital and went on the run, which Deadpool found as a challenge and went on the hunt for him which in turn had me hunt them both down so that DP didn’t kill me for sport. Long story short, Monoma’s back isn’t he hospital, this time with some knives in his legs and a bullet where the sun doesn’t shine because Wade wanted to reenact 21 Jump Street.

DP: I shot him in the D*ck! I Shot Him in the D*ck! AHAHAHA!

I also saw the latest chapter of the manga and went into a spieling void of analyzing and wondering what is going to happen to you know who.

DP: In that moment, his body moved on its own! WAAAAHHH! Now That’s Character Development!

That aside, let’s get onto the review! Now this chapter was awesome, short but awesome! I did notice that you had some typical grammar errors, also you had Acie call Izuku big brother when he was brainwashed instead of it being Zia, so watch out for that next time bro, happens to the best of us.

DP: Like how you named that Dr. Evil Bastard in you dumb Pokedamia story that controversial name and not Tsubasa like he was suppose to be-

Shut Up and Don’t bring that Up Again! Also to Hell with you, my story is awesome! Anyways, nice Aizawa calling out the Entrance Exam for the bias mess it is. He’s right that it seems biased towards those with flashy physical Quirks and gives a major disadvantage towards Quirks that only work on people, like Aizawa, Shinso, and Midnight. I would also say that they also need to research their candidates to see if any of their potential candidates are bullies, even if they somehow get better over time.

Anyways, the scene with the vestiges, oh boy I got chills! Awesome job blending in both the rainbow colored light energy and ghosts of the vestiges and the green and black background of the Omnitrix. Stellar work! Also, yeah Nana definitely accessed the Omnitrix from the inside and used it to transform Deku into Wildmutt. It makes sense because the Omnitrix has One For All in its codex stream and that the vestiges could activate the Omnitrix from within, sort of like a parallel to how the Omnitrix in the Ben 10 show could transform Ben into whatever alien he needed, even subconsciously.

Also, I agree that Nana does look suspiciously like Inko. There is actually theories about this, like Inko being the secret child of Nana, and maybe twin of Kotaro, that she hid away from All For One, only for the big bad devil to actually find her and then married Inko as Hisashi Midoriya and had Izuku. Obviously not the direction you are taking with the story and also not entirely true because it’s just a theory, but it’s something I judged wanted to voice out.

Anyways, nice move in using Wildmutt, the alien who can’t talk to fight against the dude with the Quirk that requires for talking to work. I also like how you gave Shinso some chance to fight back and punch Wildmutt in the gills, great intrusion and deduction from kid, but ultimately ended with a satisfying Wildmutt-styled judo toss.

As for their talk over Shinso’s drive it was a surprising change, pleasantly surprising. Looking at it, it does feel a little selfish to become a hero just to prove others wrong about your Quirk. I surely hope that Shinso’s new drive is possibly something along the lines of a hero and symbol to those who believe their Quirk is wrong or evil and show that no Quirk is evil, it all depends on your actions and choice, or to fight for those who can’t fight for themselves. I love this dude and hope that you do great things for him.

Moving onto Izuku’s talk with All Might over his vision. First off, respectively, I know you wanted Izuku to tell All Might every last detail over his vision but maybe not by retelling the scene we just saw, it becomes repetitive. Sorry if it sounds harsh, I only wish to review fairly and constructively, much like how I ask the same from my own reviewers. But anyways, sorry All Might, but looks like those visions are just the beginning and I can’t wait to see him getting proven wrong and see what you will do with those certain things to come from vestiges. Also you pulled my heartstrings at that final tear from All Might, had both me and DP crying into our ice cream for a few minutes.

DP: I’m going to ignore that and say that I find it ironic that Zia asks what a ghost is when she is from the very same system where ghost-like alien come from.

...Wow. That was actually good deduction there Wade. I’m impressed.

DP: Sometimes my genius...it’s frightening.

*Facepalms from bad meme* Ugh, moving on. Onto Class-1A, liked the reactions they had towards Deku almost walking off in his brainwashed state and then Momo deducing, like the young analyst protege that I wish to take up under my wing and train, that the Omnitrix was indeed activated on its own. I also love how you have Momo slowly figure out that there is something else going on with Izuku and the Omnitrix and feel as if Izuku might end up being forced to spill the beans about his secrets, maybe around the Training Camp and Kaminari Arc? And also, nice commentary from the Big 3 and Nejire’s ever growing desperate need to figure out Izuku that will likely lead to either Juvia levels of infatuation and stalkerness or Mirajane levels of giddy curiosity.

Anyways, Monoma bested Kaminari and called out Izuku, as I knew it would happen. As for his Quirks that he used, obviously he used Kosei’s Solid Air Quirk and either Shiozaki’s Vine Quirk like canon or Bondo’s Glue Quirk. I also can’t wait to see that smug grin being Four Armed punch of the stage, or blasted out, or whatever way you have Izuku best Monoma.

DP: Ooh Ooh, have him go Grey Matter and do that paralyzing grip thingy! Make him lose to Izuku’s weakest alien!

And then Todoroki vs Sero. As always, I feel bad for the human Tape dispenser and his curse to be known as the “Nice try” guy. Also, Todoroki’s overboard attack that made everyone in that crowd shit themselves. I like how you had Tetrax accidentally frozen inside and break out, that was hilarious! Also, wonder if you will show Todoroki’s chat with a Endeavor next chapter to answer Izuku’s internal question. And finally fuck pre-redemption Endeavor and his child abusing assholeness, definitely can’t wait for Izuku to burn the walking campfire with that awesome diss.

And that’s it for today! Nice short chapter with the promise of the next fights it come that will definitely be wild and hard to predict. In any case, as always, keep up the good work, stay safe and healthy, and update soon! Remember to Go Beyond! Plus...PLUS...Why aren’t you interrupting like usual?

DP: *Looks up from phone* Huh? Oh I was just looking up my recent hit job request.

And? Who’s the unlucky dude?

DP: Oh just the pedo’s on Netflix, some stupid, pandering Disney execs and the heads of the Oscars. Lots of people to kill, so little time.

Ok...well have a nice hunting...anyways Go Beyond! PLUS-

DP: ULTRA! Hah! Got ya!

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Aww man I know what's about to go down, fuckin monama is gonna go all Kevin ultimate alien form on izukus ass as soon as he touches his watch I just know it

Of course, the girl who wasn't even trying before gets the first 'totally not a date' date.

Finally someone agrees with me! I crying that you also gave my comment a shout T_T! Also wish for the harem a female tetramand that becomes overprotective of izuku someone who could Fight his tormentors and give him lovin! Maybe before the whole A.F.O ARC? You know do that omniverse episode with Kevin and princess looma only make her an oc tetramand princess who believes in true love conquers all and not might! It be cute and funny?! I like give help too great fanfic's, also really X10 hope you put that explosive asshole in his place! If one thinks about it what he does could be considered racism! He only treated izuku like that when he was discovered quirkless! Now that he's not its somewhat better! What a load of pig shit!

og and alien force set (beside omni) were good though alien force introduce a lot of retcons lols

thank god for ofa though i forgot wildmutt would be such an easy counter cant respond if you can talk i was hoping for someone new but keep it simple is a great plan

even though shinso was a douchebag izuku was still super nice to him

haha allmight freaking out is funny

copycat douchebag is cruising for a bruising he gonna get a smack down please let it be epic out that jerk in his place

harem is very good keep er going please

An ok chapter. For the most part it fallowed Cannon with a Ben 10 flavor. I am curious as to why Izuku didn’t bring up what Shinso said about Acie and Zia.

Well that was quite a chapter. My two biggest questions are what is Deku gonna pull out to fight Tororoki, and when will Mina beat the crap out of BakuTurd?

I think Izuku should call Shoto out on his attitude. Yes he has an abusive asshole father, but that’s no excuse for being such a jerk. I mean Izuku and SO many others have had worse childhoods but they didn’t turn pricks because of it, or use their past to justify their actions.

Izuku: Lots of people have had bad childhoods, but that doesn’t doesn’t give them or you the right to treat people like garbage. So stop taking your anger out on your classmates and GET OVER IT!

Cool chapter continue please.