Oh dang, a pity you decided to off Mirai, I like her when she was young. Wish she could have developed more positively. Thanks for the read, I am adding this to my favourites!

Oh, could you tell me why you decided to remove Mirai? Or was this always to be her fate?

poor mirai I was really starting to enjoy her as a character but a interesting story so far

Very nice and interesting story! Reminds me of a Song of Ice and Fire. Excited to see where it leads.

Great story I like it alot

great story so far :) I look forward to more, keep up the great work :)

Great chapter. Making Harry a descendent of Ravenclaw, who is also the daughter of Morgana, who is also a version of Sheogorath, was an unexpected curveball. The daedra I can understand that they would try to get rid of him, they are daedra after all. Mirai being unable to carry his child because of his connection to Sheogorath is a bit disappointing understandable. This is a great read. The only complaint I have is that the grammar has to be worked on.

Hey,

I'm always excited when I see there is a new Harry Potter/Elder Scrolls crossover out. Those are two of my favourite universes. I also like the subject where a character has a deep and meaningful impact on the world. So I hit jackpot with your story.

Now I've read some chapters, and if I have to describe your story, I would say it's a rough diamond. Like I mentioned before, I really like what you're writing about. You have a lot of good ideas and I can really see that. I'm always at the edge of my seat to discover what you are writing about now. I don't want to discourage you by saying this (on the contrary, I want this to give you extra motivation), the story needs to be a bit more polished. There is some room left for improvement. I'll try to briefly explain what bothers me here. If you want more details, I don't mind telling you more about it.

Well the obvious one is that there are some obvious spelling mistakes or layout mistakes. While not the biggest problem, they do scream a bit too much "amateur" since they are easily avoidable. I think this is one of the easiest (read "least effort") things you can do that would result in the biggest increase of quality of your work.
A second item that may or may not be a problem, is that I am sometimes bothered by the "tone" of communication of talk. It sounds a bit too childish. I know they are still young adolescents that you put in adult situations, but I think it can benefit by making things more "serious"
Thirdly, I find the story a bit too much told from an "eagle eye perspective". It is very distant. I want more detail, read more about struggles, learning processes, etc.
Next, and it ties in well with my third point: I like to read chapters that are a bit longer, because otherwise there is not much to it. Skin and bones so to speak. Talking more about struggles, learning processes, etc will automatically make this longer. For example, you could have writting a whole chapter about the struggle to retake Anvil. And dealing with it afterwards. Small anecdotal makes the chapter and your world more livelier. For example, you could be detailing some of the backstory of the bosmer, how he came to be in service of the Thalmor. Or maybe do a POV form one of the citizens of Anvil detailling how she experiences the beginning of the battle and giving some background on him/her (job, family, past, etc.).

Please don't take any of my comments as me hating on your work. I really appreciate you writing these chapters for us. This is me just thinking about your story and how it could improve. That doesn't mean that what I say is 100% right. And in the end it is still your story! You decide what you want to do with it! And you can't please every reader anyway . I will continue to read your story regardless.

Keep up the good work! And I am looking forward to the next chapter! :D

While I haven't posted a reply in the past but since you've asked, I'm loving the stratagy and art of war thats going on. This fiction has alot of potential and I look forward to seeing how it turns out, all glory to the son of Kyne!

It's Castle Dour not Castle Four

Making a wizard use swords and not magic, what a disgrace.

... i love it, yes, so much. Thanks a lot for the write and your commitment.

You know with how many conversations seem to be popping up that are in another language I'm starting to really consider walking away from this story...

You do realize that a story that's listed to be written in English it's your job to give the translations to the parts that aren't...

I shouldn't have to look up what what you're saying... and I'm not going to... so ya bye!

The history is great but if you keep writting phrases in dragon speech I suggest that you put their meaning in parentheses after them so it’s easier for us readers to understand.

Thanks for the chapter.

Thanks for the chapter. And that was a interesting... twist bomb?... Either way looking forward to see where this is going. Also have a strange feeling the Dragon and yarn will be saved for the Triwizard tournement.