There is a bunch of typos like sentences that make no sense. Worst of all though you gave natsu and gray english accents?! Like 'bloody' and 'mate' and 'knickers' thats not how they talk. You also have natsu describing levy's top and suddenly natsu's drink changed from 'lava whiskey' to 'coffee'. The whole convo in the beginning between natsu, mira and lucy was confusing too. I couldnt get past the english accents. If its gonna be au then label it otherwise it doesnt follow much of the canon.

Please write more rated M stories! Such a hot quickie to read, really. Catspats can suck a wet willy, you keep it up!

While the writing quality of your story is good in terms of spelling and grammar, please note this part of the Content Guidelines:

"Please note FanFiction does not accept explicit content, Fiction Rating: MA, and the rating is only presented for reference."

You should remove all of the detailed descriptions of physical interaction of sexual or violent nature in this story if you want it to remain at this site, or upload it to a site where "Fiction MA" content is allowed such as AdultFanfiction.

I hope you won't take this the wrong way but you're really good with writing smut, you manage to write it dirty without falling in the easy vulgarity, a difficult balance. Hope you had a nice valentine's day. Thanks for the one shot.

I love it pls make more omg

Damn, who knew Natsu's naughty thoughts could be this hot. Natsu horny for Lucy definitely never fails to amuse.

beautiful i love it