just found this story and im loving it

I like the power placement of parents, always wondered about war's mom's being a hero with only sidekick level durability - a dad-villain with it really makes sense. good job!

the diamond is probably a time traveling payment, right?

Un capítulo de cambio. Interesante como trabajan los "hermanos " y los cambios que ve Will sobre su amigo. Ahora, ¿Apareceran los padres de Will?

Poor Warren - even his dad thinks he's a villain - and you have Will and Warren down to a T!

I love the characterization of Mara and Battle!

As with the last chapter, this went deeply into Mara and Battle's thoughts and character. It really does humanize Battle to see him so giddy over his impending marriage and the existence, he thinks, of his sons. His mistaken assumption is quite understandable, however, he's not thinking clearly in another matter: Why on Earth would his sons travel back in time to make sure an event which had ALREADY happened in their past, happened? That makes no sense whatsoever.

What I liked even better than Mara and Battle's exchange was the conversation between Will and Warren, especially Warren's heartfelt plea. It was an excellent indicator of how much Will means to him. I'm also enjoying the fact that Warren will have to actually use his best friend's first name finally, instead of his last.

What I didn't like was the fact that the diamond didn't figure in the proposal Warren was told of, thus strongly suggesting that this trip back in time had always happened rather than being something new, and thus implying the time stream is in effect unalterable instead of changeable. In that case, Will and Warren have absolutely nothing to worry about except their own safety, since whatever "changes" they might make will have already been incorporated into the timeline they know.

Lastly, "But if he boys wanted to, they could" should have the "he" replaced with a "his".

you write the most interesting stories - thanks!

I like how dazed and dreamy Barron Battle is.

The idea of Barron Battle thinking Will is also his son is hilarious

I liked seeing a glimps of what Barron Battle and Warren’s mother’s relationship is like.

Al final no fue Will quien metió la pata sino Warren. Ni modo ya no nacerá

Jajaja.
Éste fue bueno. Admito que fue interesante ver la cantidad de armas que Barron puede tener encima y eso que puede prácticamente usar cualquiera a mano. Uyyyy fue dulce. Will Barron... o Will Peace?

Hola. El primero fue bueno. éste es mejor. Si no tomas en cuenta el desastre de ama de casa de Mara, creo que Peggy Bundy es mejor. Me encanta el manejo de los personajes y como lograste dar ese romance de Barron y la amistad de los chicos. Saludos

So close, Baron Battle! Yet so far! I'm quite curious to see how Will and Warren are going to react to the incorrect part of Battle's conclusion. Again, a good tale so far.