when is next chapter coming

very different take on naruto's fight with neji and it was awesome! I lok forward to the rest of the exam as well as the future of hinatas ninja carrier. hope you update soon

I wonder if team 7 will be a 5 man team or will one of them go to team 8. LOVING it! it just gets better and better

this story just gets better but I do wonder if hinata will continue to be a ninja or will naruto just train her?

that was both sweet and disturbing. why would her father watch?! I look forward to the next chapter

freaking LOVING this!

first chapter and I'm already LOVING this story

Where is the story cover from?

Great job with this story nicely done

And here I stop, the quality is too low. The idea was promising - a simple smut with a little of plot. First chapter was ok, more or less. Unfortunately, this one... There wasn't a single sentence without a grammar error - incests instead of insects? Really. Also, all the people acted without any logic.

I completely didn't undestand his interaction with ANBU - he is about to infiltrate the Hyuga district, he is in the middle of creating a wave of clones, his time is limitted. Then he stops, calls to ANBU and starts reminisce about their past. What the heck did just happened?

Then there is auction - anybody that works in this trade is a scum - this is the fact. So Naruto starts to friendly talk with an attendant and even gives him a large tip. To a slaver! Again, what was that?

I tried to read a couple paragraphs from the next chapter - Hinata wakes up and instead of calming her down, or using his power as her master (which would be unpleasant, but possible) he starts to tell her about Kyubi and his life. I'm quite sure she would be thinking something like 'Well Naruto, I'm glad to know more about your life, but the more urgent matter is what you will do with me.'

So, unfortunately, from this chapter the story was a pure chaos - no logic, no sense, no grammar.

You know, i always found it really funny with Naruto's speech to Neji about destiny, especially when Naruto run full ahead following the path a prophecy had set. So for all his talk about making your own and such, he sure walked the road of his own "Destiny/Fate".

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Nicely done

I think if you change the ages you are giving for Hinata and Naruto to 17, the story probably won’t get taken down as fast. It was a nice titillating romp!

Really liking this, hope you can keep it up!

Love it!

Look forward to more!