nice story. poor Ginny but she got harry

wow I like how Harry went after Ginny and told her he loved her

Poor Ginny but she got harry in the end

I loved this! Great, great job! I would see that heppening...hmm I wonder what Ron did to Fred and George? :D Great job! :)

Angelica

very sweet

~Trixie

Very cute :)

very cute!...nicely written!

o just beyond evil fred and george...hate them now...but i cant hate them forever harry and ginny and together! u r one of the best athours

*Dances around* Harry Ginny Harry Ginny! I absolutely love this! The best stories are the ones where they're total morons at discovering their feelings. And you spin words into gold. Beautiful, as always.

EP! AH! I love it!

~Annmarie

Very sweet again, LOL. I like the G/H pairing too, it really works. I think those to should get together sometime, you know? Okay I have to go now. Bye!

The story consists of six scenes, switching POV from scene to scene. The first and third scenes don't really have one specific person's POV, but as the only people present are the Weasley twins, that's sort of understandable. :)

Good call, to make George the voice of reason of the twins; he seems to play this role in canon as well. He was the one who raked Oliver Wood over the coals in Harry's second year for saying "get the Snitch or die trying", for instance.

Second and fifth scenes, Ginny's POV. She fell for the letter - but since she's *not* over Harry, the twins now have to cope with her unexpected anguished reaction at learning of the joke, not just the look on Harry's face at seeing the letter, which was all they were looking for. If her feelings had been as the twins imagined, I suppose she would have laughed at what Harry considers the 'mushy blather' of the letter.

Glitch: Hedwig is an owl, not a hummingbird; I don't think 'hover' is a proper word to use for her.

The last scene chops back and forth between Harry's POV and Ginny's, mostly Harry's except where convenient to show Ginny's feelings. POV switches ought to be treated with care and not overused, and ought to be telegraphed to the reader by section breaks if different POVs are used in the same chapter. (The rest of the chapter is good about this).

I don't think Harry would be as smooth as this when first revealing feelings to Ginny. He's not used to affectionate touch at all, and even post-OOTP has virtually no experience with romantic relationships. He spent his childhood with people who conditioned him to be protective of his private thoughts and feelings, not to open up; I'd expect him to have trouble being articulate about such things in person. He tends to be brief and to the point even in friendly written communication. Saying "I love you," in particular, would be unusual for him; as of the close of OOTP, he's never said those words nor had them said to him. I think he'd find some other way of saying it for quite awhile at the beginning of a relationship.

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For a 'reverse image', as it were, of the key notion behind this story - that of the twins palming a fake letter from Harry off on Ginny, delivered by Hedwig - try dragonfire2's _Runaway_. _Runaway_ is a now-AU story in which the twins knew that Harry and Ginny had unacknowledged feelings for one another, and deliberately interfered to try to protect her from the dangers of romantic involvement with him.

Copyediting nitpicks:

- The letter should be in italics to distinguish it from the surrounding text.

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I love Love LOVE harry/ginny fluff ~n~ stuff !

Wow! This was a wonderful story! Keep up the great work and don't let the flames get you down. Totally brilliant little one-shot. Definitely very, very good.

And I love your writing story; it's very realistic.

all i have to say is ...AW!haha