So far I'm really enjoyig this story, however there are quite a few spelling and grammer errors that make it a little hard to read, but over all it's a fun story

Please continue this story.

Bullcrap with adoption, and coming on top of 5 other spec ops teams, but hey feminist crap is "far more usefull than reality"... sayonara

Such a great read pity it's not finished :(

Pro! I loved it

And where is the rest?

Its the never ending most ADORABLE story ever!

I know that this is an old story and that the ending is more or less non existant, but it is a damn good story. Since it is an old story, asking for a "beta-reader" is a mute idea, but if I catch a cold the next few weeks I will try to proof read the story and leave a commented copy (english is my third language and my written english is quite bad but hopefully the result will be a lot easier to read despite that - it is a lot easier to spot others faults than it is to do it correct)

love the blond jokes this story has been soo good, pretty book worthy

Apart from the fact that the spelling, grammar and punctuation aren't that great and the fact that when you read this you feel like some of the words are missing from the story I'd say it's not a bad fanfic. Quite a bit longer than most as they deal with one point and move on (usually JS getting together) but this is one of those stories that continues so you aren't left with that I wonder what happened feeling. Over all not the best but not the worst I'd have to give it 4 out of 5.
*side-note* a 30 foot high Homer would be a amazing defence system! :-D

I truly don't like saying this, but I bailed out after several pages, because I kept getting distracted by all the grammar, punctuation and spelling errors. They could easily have been fixed by having someone read your story before you posted it and pointing them out. What I read seemed like it would be a good story, but I simply refuse to subject myself to something so poorly presented. And while the characterizations were amusing, none of them truly portrayed Sam or Jack or any of the other characters in the series. They were all quite out of character. I see this was posted in 2004, so I'm hoping that more recent stories have been better presented, but I won't be checking in to find out. I thought at least one of your potential readers should point all of this out to you and suggest you take more pride in how you present your work.

Alert Alert - forget the review I wrote for chapter 292.

There is a continuation.

Its calcelled Chickpox continuation by the same author.

YIPPEE

I have just spent all day reading all 292 chapters and I LOVED it! The characters are written perfectly.

Its just a real pity this story was never completed. Started in 2003, and last updated in 2004. Today is 2010.

Somewhere in there was a fantastic dumb blonde joke.

What did the blonde say when she opened a box of cheerios?

Oh look, doughnut seeds.

I wonder if you realise that chapter 152 is an exact duplicate copy of chapter 153, except that 153 is longer?

Great story, when are you going to up date it, i notice the last chapter that eas posted was 08/06/04