Sweet merciful Jesus... I think I'm in actual pain from this, maybe it's the beginning of a tumor. The mere thought that this... 'story' got almost 1'000 notes is pretty depressing even for .

The grammar is atrocious. You use ellipses WAY too much and have quite a few spelling errors. The character's are either blank slates with barely any personality or annoying as hell (i.e. Josie and Madison). Sad or serious moments are shortly shrugged off for things such as LELZ LOTR MOLDY CHEEZE ASSES, AMIRIGHT?! XD.

But, I think the biggest problem is Josie herself. She act's like a bitch to almost everyone. In fact the first thing she says when she meets Link is that he's not real and that she controls him (Which, while true, is still kind of cruel to say.), then complains about wanting to shove a candy bar down her throat. This would be alright if she developed later on into a more respectable personality, but she doesn't. You want me to stick with a character who will stay like this for most of the story..?

I don't think even if you tried this story could be saved. No amount of proper grammar and character development would since it appears to be is just your typical 'take me away to a world where I'm awesome and important' story that this site is flooded with. Which is sad since someone being taken into a game/another world could and has been done really well and interestingly.

But, whatever, this story has been dead for about 8 years anyway. But I thought I'd might as well pop in my unpopular opinion. For either shits and giggles or to relieve the intense stress I felt? I'm not sure...

Too bad this story was abandoned... it was really good

...is it just me or you spelt and used 'molded' wrong. If you meant spoiled cheese...you meant mouldy cheese? Molded cheese is like shaped cheese isn't it? Or maybe it's just different English. Because I been seeing a lot 'moldy' around...and last time I checked it was 'mouldy'. If that's how it's normally spelt...then it's just my English is different from yours. Sorry for wasting your time with this pointless review. I hope you update soon!

Yeah random review here, so far it's a great and entertaining story, also I was curios what my name means, it's Renée :)

*go over* my story, Unearthly, and turn it into something waaaay better! All thanks to you, my dear cream puff! I looooooooove this story, so I hope you don't have to stay off soda too long.

Hiiiii! Wow, your story is freaking amazing! You actually inspired me to totally go

I wonder what the color the molded cheese took is called? Well, anywho...I hope you update as soon as possible.

please can you update, pwetty pwese *puppy dog eyes*

This is really good so far! It's already making me laugh, haha. I'm looking forward to reading the rest of this...I never would've though to write something like this before :P

Do you have a DeviantART account? I would love to add you and your great writing (:

I was listening to the "

" ramix while reading this chappy...(Sola:Woot destiny! Luna: Idiot... Me: Stop fighting!)

You know, the entire "dressed in sun-god robes on top of a pyramid. And there were thousands of chihuahua's with purple bonnets on, yelling 'Goosefraba' and throwing pickles at you" dream? I had it! Buuuuuuuuuuut, the Chihuahuas were yelling 'Frabagoose' instead.

P.S. Awesome story, write more...pleze?

HEY! I love your story but I am getting tired of you not updating for almost three years! When are you going to update again! UPDATE PLEASE!

I think you did die.

*grins* I like the four swords future scene it made me laugh...in a good way...

Sigh. I know this story is abandoned, but I would like to see it continued. Ah well.