I enjoyed this.

I had to reread a few lines due to mis-spelling but other than that it was good.

It was the last paragraph that really made it though. Good job.

It was fun reading through this. You have some nice ideas, I like the bit about the military slang, and when he really had been practising. It ended in a nice rounded way and felt complete and sweet. Please take heed of Purpleyin's comments and keep getting better! Write lots more...

Nice idea but quite a number of spelling mistakes and some bits don't read so in character, is more like you going through episodes rather than anything else. Plus from Sheppards perspective there would be more than in the episodes so adding in stuff not seen on shown, the little things would make it fuller; a well rounded fic.

If it was improved then I'd probably inclinced to say it was really good or better than that rather than just ok/good.