This was fantastic. You managed to capture the two of them very well. I know there's probably no chance of there being another chapter added, but I can be naively hopeful.

yay! third chapter please!

OMG! This is so cute! *hugs to death*

Xx-Bex-xX

I liked this one. A lot of sensuality, and an interesting look at Roy - and the possible ways his and Riza's relationship could have changed after the end of the series. Although I find his fixation on remaining single a little odd, given how he seems to have realized that he cares rather specially for Riza... But oh well.

Love the pairing, and it was a good story. Squee!

wow. this is an awesome story. roy's not all gushy, nor is hawkeye. you've captured them pretty well, i think.

ja ne, and keep writing,

kinokokichigai

nicely written. cant wait for more

Some little grammar errors sprinkled through both chapters. Very interesting insight into what their relaitonship is. Gotta love Hawkeye's preparededness! Keep writing!

...hey, now that I think of it, it DOES make sense that she'd be that general's granddaughter. Hm...mind if I use that in whatever story I may write? :D

This story is excellently done- keep it up! Not enough post-series Royai fic out there!

I have no idea why this story doesn't get more reviews, it's phenomenally well written. I absolutely love it, and I'm totally begging you to update soon. It's so deep and interesting and you use correct grammar and punctuation and spelling! *GASP!* Anyways, I love it, love it, love it. Keep it up!

~Merc

XP That was so incredibly cute. Being a romantic-comedy addict/writer, I can't help but wonder WHAT would have happened if Hawkeye had woken up in the middle of it... LOL..

cool, cant wait for more.

That is so totally cute. I absolutely love this story, it's the most realistic story I think I've seen yet about what a post-series idea would be like.

I'm kinda curious if you could do a second chapter of it. I know it's supposed to be a one-shot, but I think it would be interesting to explore how Roy would get around the all the red tape in order to marry Riza without making it seem as though there had been something going on before it was alright to fraternize with fellow soldiers.

Anyways, great job!

~Merc

Wonderful. :) Thank you so much for writing this.

I really enjoyed this-and thanks so much for participating in the challenge! I like the focuses that you chose, and the way that you incorperated them into this 'fic.

I liked the way that you've portrayed Roy and Riza's relationship here-a little more realistic, a little more human than it sometimes is, but without that underlying bitterness that creeps in very easily with this pair. I also like the charcater of the General-he seems such an old soul, as if from another era. I enjoyed him immensly.

All in all, this is quite nicely written-it's a very different style than I usually read, which made it all the more refreshing. Thanks again for participating! (and apologies for the unsigned seems to dislike me these days. _6)