Reviews for Unexpected Majin |
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![]() ![]() ![]() You keep breaking the fourth wall which completely ruins immersion. It would be appropriate if this as a comedy or a parody, but it's supposedly a completely serious endeavor. |
![]() ![]() pleas do more |
![]() ![]() Update please |
![]() ![]() ![]() nice |
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![]() ![]() ![]() This... doesnt make ANY sense. Vegeta already died and came back so he kinda "paid" for his previous sins. And he didnt turn Majin in this reality/universe so there would be no reason for him to go to hfil. |
![]() ![]() This story makes no sense vegeta got no power boost from the awakening why should gohan? |
![]() ![]() ![]() The potential in this story is tremendous, no joke. The best thing about it is that you didn't make Gohan outright evil without a good, solid reason. Sometimes when people turn a main character eavil they make a AU where everyone hates and abuses them, or use some half-based motive to make the protagonist change sides. I've been paying visits to the other Majin Gohan stories, but none could compare to yours. No, this is no flattery. Your story is the best because shows Gohan's character escalating. The only tragedy I see is that this master-piece has been abandoned since 2007. You probably retired from fanfiction, but I hoped you could continue this like so many other readers. By the looks of things, I see two outcomes for Gohan at the end of this chapter: A ) He died and on the Otherworld he'll be taken to the world of the Kais. B ) The slight chance he may have achieved Super Saiyan 3 level. Personally I think A (or something similar to it) is the most credible one, given the last paragraph of the chapter. Also, I don't think Babidi will last much longer, if what you say on the bottom note 'Oh well, I suppose he deserved it, considering...cough'. Babidi is about to bite the dust and you wanted to give him a POV before he goes. Anyways, though I doubt you'll read this comment, I still keep a faint, dream-like hope you'll finish this. |
![]() ![]() ![]() You can't just leave it all there! This story has a lot of potential and you are going to waste it if you don't carry on this story. Seriously even people are still reading this story hoping that you would continue on with this story. It's 2015 now and the last you've updated was in 2007. This shows it has a lot of potential, don't let it go to waste! Please do carry on otherwise it would be a shame if you don't. I'm hoping that one day you do come back to finishing this fanfiction as you have mentioned chapter 31. |
![]() ![]() plz finish with the next chapter, i needz to know how Gohan fairs! :D |
![]() ![]() you should have gohan grow his tail back for extra kicks... |
![]() ![]() This story had me on edge of my seat! Wow! I lived this fic. I could almost picture each kick an punch that was thrown I could see gohan in all his anger you did one hell of a job with this fic. I hope you update soon because I'm looking forward to next chapter.. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Do the next chapter please. |
![]() ![]() please hurry and finish the book, it is really excellent so far, and i can't wait for more! |
![]() ![]() Also u said there would be another chapter so make more please I gotta know how it ends and don't tie it up in one quick chapter it still has so much potential |