OMG OMG OMG OMG! I LOVE THIS PLOST TWIST BY ADDING THE HARD CONTACT COMMANDOS INTO THE FREY!THIS IS AMAZING! AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!

I’m *facepalms self* HOLY FUCK WHAT THE FUCK IS GREVIOUS DOING HERE HOLY SHIT.

Recently watched one of the best Sci-Fi crossovers (Star wars, Star Trek, Halo and mass effect so I can't wait to read this.

Uh... The Mongoose has been around since way before that. It's not a "new" vehicle.

I don't normally review early on in longer stories, since things might be fixed in later chapters, but there are some things that stand out.

Both the Commandos and the Chief would be FAR more paranoid than this. For one, the CIS is known by every trooper to be led by non droids, trandoshians, and general canon fodder. Or, take the Mandalorians as an example; deadly warriors who are NOT friendly to the republic, although not always enemies either.
Or, there's Chief, who's lived his whole life fighting, and trusting his instincts- which, with him surviving as long as he has, are on the paranoid side. Remember, he's not above incapacitating and even killing humans: the Spartan Program was originally planned to wipe out the rebels hiding in the asteroid belts- before the Covenant got them, that is.

In addition, for Chief's explanation: Would the Chief really give his backstory, potential secrets to be exploited by people who he just met AND are not UNSC? When has Chief ever said anything more than a few lines to even people he trusts, like Cortanna?

Finally, the time portal: If you go through a portal in time, would the timelines go at the same pace? It seems far more likely that even if chief spent 10 years in the 'past' (the next few galaxies over?) the second he goes back into the portal he returns to the same time he left.

That said, the story has a good premise, and it's certainly long enough to provide a comprehensive experience, so I look forward to reading!

this shit is fucking trash dude.

Argh... cringey... that's cringey as hell! But I'll try to bear with it.

Um... it all started rather well, but... a door? Seriously? You could have come up with something way more better than this...

I was running out of stories to read, and I thought I'd give this a try... man was that a HORRIBLE mistake. First off why is the Chief so OC? He literally acts no way a Spartan II would ever act. Secondly, the Chief and Sergeant Johnson would rather die than help the covenant, and the Chief has NEVER been taken as a prisoner of war over the THIRTY years of the H/C war. He's won every award the UNSC can give, EXCEPT the POW medal. So for him to be captured so easily... is bullshit. I didn't read past the first chapters, and I'm sure I would've found more crap.

How is it that the clones are from the past it should be the other way around you jackass.

Okay, I have to admit: your version of Halo 3 could be a video game on its own...besides Gears of War.

I have to admit, this was a really interesting read. Now the Empire has to beware...

Talk about a bad field day.

Loved reading this story. Kept me up at Night in Boarding School way past my designated Lights out (Who listens to that). Fount your accouNt through Sins Of A Galatic Empire (Shame he stopped that). Thank you for the read and I will now be moving on on to SW:CE.

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Its great so far!

GREAT