I am enjoying this story so far and you have been doing a good job with it. If you don't mind me making a suggestion, I think that Ayane really needs to fess up to Kasumi about what is bothering her. I mean she has always hated Kasumi for something but does not want to talk about it. She seems to delight in torturing Kasumi and there is never a reason as to why she does it. Other than that a great fic if I do say so myself and you probably do too. -

Looking forward to the next chapter,

Ian

*puts this fic into her favorites* W00t, please continue! I really like this! D

I'm back...and I thought about your words. First: I think Ayane could be colder. Second: Kasumi(For me)would never, I mean NEVER, curse like that. And finally: the plot is thin but getting thicker. But still, I'm impressed. Up-date soon.

Sorry it's took so long to R&R, I've been busy with work and all.

I see that you're still doing what you do best.

However, I sense the story is nearing its end.

I'm sure you can drag it out once the 3 different sets of foes find eachother though.

Again, thanks for the entertainment.

Great story thus far.

Congrats to you! I am Dan von Hinden, a fairly big yet unknown reviewer, and I'm happy to say that this story is good compaired to other stories.

P.S. Tell "Bill the Bard," if he's still around, that I said he should accept any review from anyone and not just authers. And that he is the best auther.

An excellent read so far. I can't wait to read the next chapter. This and the other chapters have been brilliant and I do hope you write another one soon. Highly recommended, a great read.

Illius

I'd be extremly happy if you up-dated this story by the end off the week...AND make it better. Your other choice is to RE-DO THE WHOLE THING!

"I grow tired of this!"

Anakin Skywalker-Epi.I the game.

You continue the suspense building...

That's good, you know how to do your action... gotta give it to ya.

Most people would think a couple of guys like us can't write.

I'm hopin' to get my self enough free time to put something up here... It'll probably be a different alias than † Rayne † though...

Maybe after I do that we can compare notes.

I look forwerd to the next chapter.

Ah come on now! Don't leave it hanging like that!

I'm dyin' to see the next chapter.

I'm also curious as to how strong the villain truly is.

:Looks at watch and taps foot.: "I"m waiting!"

Nice way to introduce a new/unknown/never seen before character.

Again, nicely done.

Chapter 2 is just what I'd expect. Not the story line but the fact that you've done as well as you have with it.

Keepin' my interest here... that's good.

Again, keep up the good work!

Very interesting and a great way to start a story like this. I'm gettin' ready to start on chapter 2. I'm glad I found someone who knows how to write as good as you do. Keep up the great work!

I like the story, but sumthings bothering me about the fiting seaquinnses.

Ah,interesting idea. I know it's not Doa storyline, but are the siblings relationship the same? Kas/Ayane fued at all? Hm, Mystery Girl...