That was very sweet but you spelled divorce wrong lol

I forgot piccalo was a bad guy

Aw,he mentioned the dragon balls to help chichi:)

awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww how cute!

perfect!

Oh man, the saiyan saga was a major game changer. I loved how you ended this to as it ushers in that saga. i felt really sad for Chichi though. all that loss and trauma would be more than enough to drive anyone insane but she remained strong. I love how you depicted their beginnings and it helps flesh out their characters in such a way you can't help but cheer for them all the way.

Great! Love it so far! There are just a few mistakes that keep cropping up that need some attention:

1) you tend to consistently use "your" when you actually need "you're," the contracted form of "you are". For example: it should be "you're too much." When it's done the other way, it reads incorrectly as the person (Goku, in this case) possessing something called a "Too Much" and turns it into a sentence fragment.

2) I THINK (of course, I can't be positive) that when you are using "generally" you actually want "genuinely." The first means in general or on average while the latter means truly or honestly.

3) Unless it's being done to sound more colloquial and casual, it really should be "would have" and not "would of." The second is incorrect grammatically for a number of reasons I won't go into, here.

There are a few other little mistakes here and there, but those are the ones I noticed as being more consistent. I also don't want to make my list too long, or it might seem like I don't like your story, and that just isn't the case!

Thank you for all your hard work! I'm currently only done reading the second chapter, but I've really enjoyed what you've written so far, especially your characterizations!

M.C.

At first, I had passed by this story and hadn't even given it the chance it truly deserved, but I'm so glad I decided to go back are read it. The way you characterized the characters was amazing and it was beautifully written. This is an amazing story

I absolutely loved this story. Beautifully writtenI loved how it's written over time and not just all at once &a dragging. It was absolutely perfect. Characters are genuineeverything just synced together well

I thought you should know, this is my tenth time re-reading this fic, and I still love it!

Aww so sad :'''')

What a wonderful description of marriage and love in general, Goku's naivety makes things so clear! Plus, you write so structured and have such an even flow, it's beautiful to read. It feels like it's really happening, very realistically described. What's best though, is that I can agree with the words you put into Chichi's mouth, what she tells Goku about marriage and husbands and wives and love. You wrote about their careful advance in to a real relationship without falling into stereotypes or gender roles.
Also, regarding he characters we're dealing with here, you give a very realistic idea of their married life together, especially during the first few months/years, when everything is still new and unfamiliar (more so for them than for a regularly married couple) and they have to get accustomed to this type of life.

Sorry if my sentences are disjointed and kind of incoherent - it's late here. But you deserve a much better review because this is awesome and you don't find gold nuggets like these in the giant flea market that is the internet. I am so impressed with your writing.

Very sweet!

That was the most beautiful and satisfying Goku and Chichi story I've ever read. You have an absolutely amazing way with words. I haven't cried like that over a fanfiction in a long while, bravo you have an amazing talent!

Awww.!
This is so touching...