well it was good and you can stop reading here if you want but i suggest the following:

1)vary you sentences (length wise)

2)more detail about everything

3)no repeating things (IE:when your talking about the grave)

4)never stop a story until you feel it's done (or you get writers block but even then save it)

5)keep up the good work

AW!-huggles Edo-kun-

-as an afterthought- WHY THE HELL DID YOU KILL ARU-KUN? -jumps on MOSESrECINLY42- die!

Actually, that wasn't half bad! Although, I for one don't like using Aru/Alu or Edo. If you're gonna write in English, use their English names. 8/10.

-bawling- I cried reading this! This was SO GOOD!

this sounds like two stories that i have read before but it was still good. ;_;

You are the angst queen! *cackles* these are really good! I do hope write a whole bunch mores they are awesome.

o, poor Ed. *huggles him*

hi mose it's andrea that was a pretty good start and could you review for my story! plz!

aww that is so sweet aw i love the Ed and Roy pairings thye should go togethere in the anime because they work togethere and are always flriting if you look at them besides no one else can handle Ed or Roy they're made for each other okies later

aww, poor ed. _

very sad, but really nice. although it /did/ go a TEENY WEENY bit fast (just a bit), it was still very nice.

good job. :)

soo sad... (adds you to faves list)

This was so sad! I like the plot but could you put up another chapter? please!

Dagger1211

IT IS GOOD BUT DO A NEW CHAPTER!

i beta'd... thank me.

I don't think it sucks...I read it really, really quickly compared to usual (which is definitely saying something). It made me cry.