Nice description of Seto's spiral into infatuation here.

this is such a great story! ive read it so many times and i really dont get how it doesnt have more reveiws when its so rilliant. ots literally one of the best seto/anzu stories on this site!

iloved the whole fifty-four thoughts thing, it made me laugh. she shpuld have done one more thing just at the end and made it a solid fifty-five

Much to smutty for my taste :\

This was a brilliant story! You are a very talented writer!

This story has so much potential. I wait to see what happens next!

Thanks for writing such a great story. I really enjoyed it. I'll be checking your profile for more great stories :-)!

I love it! Great job. :)

That... was beautiful.

“Listen, you vertically challenged piece of biological fault,"

*gasps* So it's YOUR fault! I got called that the other day (jokingly, don't worry) by my friend who also reads various YGO fanfiction. Curse you!

Aside from it TOTALLY BEING YOUR FAULT I got insulted in a very creative (or not, since she stole it from you) manner, I really do love this story. Like, a lot.

I am enjoying this juicy story. The dialogue and inner thoughts were very well thought out and work very well together. I think the disbelief and turmoil in their attracction for each other comes through very nicely in their inner thoughts. The conversations keep the characters true to their thoughts, and that's made it a very entertaining read. I look forward to reading on but just wanted to send my kudos your way for a great story.

Well, first of all I would like to say that I enjoyed the story very much :) I'm kind of busy, so I'm sorry if I don't get to comment on your other stories (but that's why I'm going to leave a rather long review ;).

1. Literary style

I like the way you write: the story functions well as a whole (that can be hard to achieve because you post chapter by chapter), the style is "coherent" through each chapter, and you have a very good eye for descriptions - especially for describing "non-physical" elements like emotions and sensations. It's wonderful how you manage to find a comparison that so vividly conveys an emotion or sensation (the scene where they first kiss). Also, you dose the descriptions correctly and don't trail of with unnecessary subplots, which prevents the story from becoming boring (trust me, I've read some really BORING fics in my time :P). Furthermore, the length of the story and chapters is good, not to short, and not too tiering to read. The only thing that I have some tiny-weeny criticism about is that you go into too much detail around Seto and somewhat neglect Tea, giving the impression that he over thinks everything while some of Tea's interesting thoughts don't get explored enough (like the good-girl-gone-bad transition and her realization that the unusual relationship that they share still makes her very content - I especially like this idea because excepting the fact that things don't have to be perfect and letting go of Ken&Barbie fantasies is a sign of maturing). Don't be afraid to write Tea because you're definitely on the right track. I don't know how old you are, but your style is very mature (I hate it when I read a fic and immediately know a teenager is behind it because of all the unnecessary drama and slang). So keep on improving, and you should be proud of yourself because you get a spotless B in style :)

2. Fanfic elements (not so objective on this one ;)

I just luved it! ;) The characters where true to their cartoon personalities (yeah, yeah, I know it's fiction, but I feel somewhat disappointed when I read a fic and feel as the author only borrowed the names for characters that don't even barely resemble the original). I find it a bit unrealistic when fic authors portray Seto as being a permanent asshole (so why the hell does Tea like him then?) or a wimpy never-been-touched virgin (someone with his personality stays self assured no matter what the subject may be ;). And of course, there were no alien invasions, mutated viruses or dramatic deaths (as I said, I know it's fiction, but this way it seems less like a cheap romance novel or SF story ;). And there was even a happy end! :D To sum up, I enjoyed reading this and it made me feel all peachy and perky ;) (my favorite is the scene on the swings - easygoing, nothing too dramatic, and yet very intimate and romantic). So, as an azureshipping fanfic, I give it a big, fat, shiny - A :D

P.S. Like the "Sevenfold" project, it's a really good way to practice, so don't worry if the quality of the stories varies - practice makes perfect ;)

P.P.S. You may find some inspiration in this story "Clean", I found it quite funny: /s/2742606/1/

Wow, I sure took up a lot of review space ;) Anyway, keep up the good work, and hope you write something like "Addiction" in the future for all of us still young (and rather perky) at heart ;)

...*Has fallen madly in love with your fanfic*

I wish it was M,you could pull off an even sexier scene, but THIS is totally hardocre.

HEE! This was a really good chapter. I think you've gotton me addicted to this. I forget it's you that wrote all this, I just go off into really good story la la land.

You, my friend, have turned me into a giggling little girl. I'm ashamed at myself for doing it, but I've decided to blame you. HOW DARE YOU WRITE SOMETHING THIS GOOD! heh, really it was great.

much love from the lemur.