Might be late at this, your by far a excellent writer. I've been a fan of the kotor series for a while. A problem I see quite often with writers is when your do fluff stuff the personality of the main characters seem to change. Revan is fine, just how I'd imagine him to be but bastila would be more shy and avoidant about the possible relationship with revan, also she would by far still be giving him lectures about his crazy killing techniques. Definatly a good writer, keep up the good work :)

Another great chapter.

And as far as that poll goes, in terms of all-around most badass Dark Jedi/Sith Lord, my vote goes to Darth Revan, hands down! He's the perfect combination of everything needed in a Dark Jedi/Sith Lord. But if we're talking purely in terms of skill with a Lightsaber, then based on everything I've heard/read so far, Exar Kun wins. I mean, the guy used a Double-Saber with ONE HAND! The amount of skill and training he had to have to do that must have been insane!

Well at least Bastila didn't call Revan "scruffy-looking"! That's Leia's job to call Han that!

Good so far and for the quiz it is darth sidious he stated a war that he was in charge of on both sides

Needs morw romance

Tip: God is not involved in star wars

great story

First fanfic...im impressed simply well done.

This is the best story I have ever read about Bastilla and Revan! Great Job!

Read all 19 chapters in several hours. Very pleased. I would say this is one of my favorite KoToR fanfics.

Oy! I have a tip for u whenever your Internet goes down! If its on wi-fi, then check the modem-satellite like thing in which it generates the wi-fi from. It's most likely off or the wi-fi on it is off. And if u don't have wi-fi, and the Internet is down, that just means that far too many people are on the Internet at once. I cannot elaborate further, cause then I'd be getting all technical nerd on you! Hope this helps! BTW EXCELLENT CHAPTER! I absolutely LOVE it! Keep up the good work

Okay so I said I would read Crimson Shadow after temptation but as this was one of your completed stories I decided to move here 1st. Amazing read and I could tell how you had grown as a writer from this to Temptations.

Supposed to have been posted 24 February 2012, at and the Coruscant Entertainment Center in my The Critic's Two Cents. but I had problems with my computer that literally made every document and link hidden, and flaked on attaching these reviews to the original story threads for the last year. Everyone say; 'Mach is a flake, Mach is a yo-yo'. Better yet (Waves hand) 'Mach is trying, but he's still a flake'.

Then to make me even more like a buttermilk biscuit (more flaky) my computer went down again in June of 2012 with yet another virus. So this is even later...

KOTOR on Dantooine: The team discovers the first Star Map

Basically a generic retelling of the scene with a few additions to perk it up.

Technical note: As much as the game designers loved stealth and defensive force screens on the personal level there is no sign of them in the movies except for the ones used by the droidikas. This detracts from the enjoyment for a reader who had not played them, and for those readers that know what I have just said.

As I said, generic. The piece has some fun scenes, Carth enjoying the interplay between Bastila and Revan

I liked this bastila/revan chapter you did a really good job! Great chapter

Great work on this. Very well done.