Aww what a great story it is too bad it is over but I guess you will probable write a squeal if not you should because I would love to see what happens next and of course I will review it like this one.
Till Next Time

no offense or anything, but this is nota squallxfujin fic, it's a seiferxfujin, even if squall happens to be the main ,my point is,you labeled it wrong

Hmm. Well, you made Squall better at the end, since he now knew that Fujin hadn't been cheating on him he wasn't angry. I still don't agree with how you did Squall. I still would've preferred Squall/Fujin. I still don't agree with Seifer/Fujin. But it's well written, and you ended it happily. I guess I like this story more than I dislike it. It's a great story actually, just not for me. Good work, maybe you should consider doing a fluffy Squall/Fujin. I think you could probably do it well. Anyways, Gravaja Umbros, signing off.

Aww, I was hoping for a fluffy Squall/Fujin. I'm still hopeful, but it doesn't look like it's going that way. I don't really like Seifer, and personally I think that Squall would be a much more responsible father. I was looking forward to some "He's your son, I never told you because I thought you'd reject us." "My son? I've been acting so harsh because I thought you cheated on me. It hurt so much because of how much I loved you, still love you. I may not have been ready, but I'd have given my life trying to be the man you need me to be."

"Oh, Squall. Do you mean it? Even know, I don't really love Seifer, I was just doing this so he could be a father for my son. But, if you mean it...?" "I do." "I'm so sorry. I wish I had realized. It's not to late you know. To be his father, if you want to try?" Squall looked at his feet nervously. "There's nothing I'd rather do."

Of course that's just a very basic, rather cliche dialog-only version of what I hoped so. It could be fleshed out so much more and made very good. I'm keeping reading, and it's written very well (it's making me all emotional) but I don't support Fujin/Seifer and disagree with how you're making Squall, but you've got me interested. And I don't mean this as a flame, just a (hopefully) useful criticism, so sorry if you take it that way or are offended by it. On to the next chapter!

yaah! happy ending you did a great job... a sequal... up to you I don't mind !

Aw! So very sweet. Glad to see a happy ending. _ Also very glad that Squall reacted as well as he did. Very nice.

MWHAHAHA! ::hands over a huge lollipop:: Excellent story! I could definatly go for a sequel!

I REALLY like this story so far, I hope you decide to come back to it.

This is a really interesting story I don't think I have ever seen Squall portrayed so cold before even if it is for a reason to protect his child. I hope that you decide to continue this story later on down the road.

Hey, great story. There's nothing wrong with it, and I hope you write more. If you do, I can't wait to read it! :)

how could squall not want his cute kid (meanie)...

anywayz continue soon please !

aw so fujin and seifer kiss !

been awhile since i've been 'lost'... anywayz great job with this chappie ! very sweet

I'm right here :grins: Sorry, my telephone line died so no internet access :sweatdrop: It was horrific!

Anyway, the review: Good chapter, I have to admit that I can see why Squall is doing what he is. Fear! I hope that in time he gets over it - although I don't want to see Fujin and Seifer break up. That would be sad! :begs: please don't let them break up! You write them so well - even if they are fighting.

sigh! I wanna be kissed like that! Very sweet!