Ole Gorguts will be back Dawn of War three says so.

A most holy warrior of the imperium consorting with xenos? HERESY! *Blam*

I know this is an older story and my review may no longer even matter or register at this point but I feel like typing this down anyway. I think this fic started off pretty well but then began to devolve around me. Jacques seems to be incredibly weak for a Space Marine. He gets knocked out by drugs and gets knocked out by an anthropomorphic bird by pistol-whipping him. Unless this bird is SUPER strong and that pistol was made of the toughest materials, that wouldn't have happened. You seem to be wanting to make the Lylatians stronger to be able to stand up in roughly the same category as an Astartes and the Imperium of Man but then go about saying how the Imperium could wipe out Lylat with little to no effort earlier on in the fic. It is just to much of a detraction from the facts about Space Marines for me to continue on reading. So to reiterate, you started off very well, but then lost a lot of traction around these last couple of chapters.

Great ending to a super awesome crossover, loved the intense battle scenes and non-battle scenes with Star Fox and Jacques.

Felt bad for the Star Fox team having to say good bye to the space marine who became a part of them.

Hi me again, you also managed to tie in the two universes in a way that does not affect either universe or make them seem separate. Aside from a few technicalities, well done!

I was hooked the moment I began to read this, despite a few grammatical errors, (By the way Warhammer 40000 is only in a single galaxy not the universe). Despite that this is the best fanfic I have ever read. And if he sequals are anything like this, I will be busy reading them for a while.

This story was a pleasent surprise. A few fluffy heresy, but to the warp with it ! It was a nice reading anyway !

Alas, I have yet to remind the Emperor's words...

"Suffer not the furries to live !"

You seem to be describing Imperial Karskins/stormtroopers. You severely under powered space marines. To give a few feats, they have acidic spit, can survive being stepped on by a titan, single squads of marines cuting through entire ork waaaghs, dodging bullets, having grenades go off in their face and staggering a little being their only reaction, having their leg blown off and still fighting, fighting at such speeds they appear to be nothing but a blur to humans. I suggest the fanfic "The Misfits" to get a solid idea of a marine's abilities. As of right now, your space marines are more or less an armored human. Actual space marines are augmented to the point they aren't even considered human.

pls pls pls pls pls pls write a sequal pls

What's English and French? It's the 41st millennium. A twenty four years old Astares? No. Just no. Wait, is this a Pretty Marine under the guise of an Ultramarine? That's just too much.

HIS NAME IS MARNEUS CALGAR!

Also good chapter.

You do realise his name's MARNEUS CALGAR, not Maccrage, That's a place, not a person, the chapter master of the Ultramarines is MARNEUS CALGAR

I gotta say this, sorry, but you mentioned all the Space Marine implants, (not individually but you know they're there) so surely you know that by the time ethat colonel struck Jaques the second time all his wounds would have healed, and I wont go into how a normal strike from the colonel, no matter how hard, wouldn't even have bruised.

Great story so far though, bring the storm.

Hiya; just finished reading this again. I decided it was about time I gave an overall review.

Pros- The storyline is brilliant, with its recurring plot devices and good, descriptive battles. Charaterisation was great, particually the Star Fox based characters. Clearly some good research has gone into the WH40K background for this

Cons- The censoring is kinda annoying; I doubt anyone would mind the swear words. I also think the parts where a sentence is cut into two parts by an explanation of speach happens a little too often. Also I think Fara was a little unneeded, unless she's going to make an appearence in the sequal (which I WILL be reading soon)

I also partly agree with the others that Jac isn't as powerful as an Astartes normally is, but I just put that down to the fact that Jac is such a young marine compared to the centries old veterans we normally read about.

But damn, some of your reviers ain't half full of themselves. By thr look of it I'd say they read like 3 pages on Warhammer wiki and think they're an expect on everything WH related. I mean what the heck is wrong with that 'Skulls' Laughing'?

Anyway, overall a brilliantly written, well thought out, enjoyable and original fic. 8.5 out of 10

And yet, another thing: How you depict the Astartes here is...simply not right.

They do not fight for 'Honor'.

A Space Marine sacrifices EVERYTHING, after thousands of years of service he dies on the battlefield as a martyr, gets transisted into the dreadnought and fights for another few millenia, until he dies AGAIN. In death, the Emperor deems him worthy of joining the legion of the damned, allows him to go on doing his duty for the rest of eternity.

A Space Marine sacrifices his 'Honor' if he has to, just as he sacrifices his very soul if he has to.

There is NOTHING a Space Marine DOESNT sacrifice.

Another thing: The bolter ammunition (bolts) actually wear one pound, are as big as a grown up man's fist and upon entering the target they explode spherically. So, practically, they are ARMOR PIERCING GRENADE LAUNCHERS. What I see here from the Space Marine's weaponry...just disappointing, you gave the bolter the charms of today's CV, WEAK.