Pretty decent story you have here. It was a little slow going in the middle, but I finally got it done. I would suggest re-doing the summary, because I was expecting something totally different when I started reading this.

One of my few complaints is that people would be into the story for quite awhile, and they would have a confrontation with Ron(i.e. Seamus) and then it seemed as though they dropped off the face of the earth. And the story should have included more people, instead of being a bright spotlight on Harry, Ron, Hermione and Draco, casting everyone else that goes to Hogwarts in shadow.

It would also be nice to see and update, and find out what exactly Harry has planned.

i love this story alot. please come back with more hun please

“Humph Humph,” called Ron, from behind them.

ron and draco always say that!

“What did you just say bitch,” she yelled.

“Hermione, no,” yelled Ron as he gripped her wrist to hinder her descent upon Pansy face. Pansy stuck her tongue out at her as she exited. Hermione fixed her hair and turned to face Malfoy angrily.

“You need to control that girlfriend of yours Malfoy,” Hermione jeered.

“Looks to me like you should be the one being controlled Granger. Can I offer you a leash?” Malfoy laughed.

hah go hermione

“Yes, luck. 200 points to 10; pure luck,” cackled Ron.

that does not mater. grys can have 200 and then the slyterhians can catch the snitch and win lol with only 2 points ah

he waited to long to answer though, so the truth was confirmed for her. She bit her lip in silent happiness as images flashed before her of them lying across some random bed, going at it. A small moan escaped her; making Ron stop to look sideways at her.

“What’s wrong with you?” he asked.

“Oh, nothing; so how long as this been going on?” she asked hoping she didn’t sound too eager.

“What, I didn’t say we were Mione,” said Ron angrily

hehe i love how turned on mione is wanting to watch them ahah

”What’s that suppose to mean?” Ron asked as he handed her the map. She folded it up and placed it under her arm.

“I don’t know. Malfoy is pretty forceful.” She laughed. Ron just shook his head and walked to the portrait hole.

i dont get why he didnt just keep it himself LMAFO and what hermione said is funny ahha

parvatis is such a fucking bitch. i hate her.

“You can write a book about things you don’t know about me Weaselbee,” smiled Malfoy as he gripped Ron’s arm tightly.

lol

Seamus shook his head at him in disgust

oh shut up you rapiest

“So, I guess you are as ready to accept their relationship as I am?” she smirked sarcastically.

“We’ve worked together before and it didn’t work. We have to be more cunning this time. We have to get them apart no matter what happens,” smiled Harry seriously.

“I know what you mean. Malfoy actually thinks I’ll accept his lame invitation to sit around like a love sick puppy while he snogs someone else. Humph, he doesn’t know me at all obviously.”

“I guess not. So when is she showing up?”

“She should have been here already,” said Pansy as she glanced at her watch.

They sat in silence for a few minutes until there was a knock on the door. Parvati Patil walked in. She smiled at the two of them and took the butter beer Pansy offered her.

“So, Harry, you’re not ready to take my advice to let Ron and Malfoy be together are you?”

He shook his head and smiled. “You know that I’ll never do that. But for the time being I’m willing to pretend.”

Parvati smiled and turned her attention to Pansy. “And you are just as unwilling?” Pansy nodded.

“Well, I’ve talked to Lavender and she’s completely willing to help you two once she gets out of detainment,” said Parvati.

“Great, until then,” said Pansy, “Let’s put on a good face around our two lover boys okay Harry?”

Harry raised his bottle into the air and nodded his head. “To Ron and Malfoy.”

The girls followed, smiling smugly, and then laughing maliciously. “To Ron and Malfoy.”

there so freaking patheidic these 4

“Well, at least the Dursley’s could care less is I’m gay or not,” laughed Harry to break the uncomfortable silence. “I’m quite sure Dudley will think he’ll have a better chance of beating me up than ever before.

lol

you know hun for malfoy instead of saying he said...you say SHE said alot lol

I was on my way to my dorm when I saw him lying on the ground wrapped in a sheet. He was bleeding from the head, so I brought him here,” he concluded. “Can I go now?” he asked.

holy shit...his roomies threw him out?jerk

It was Ron’s stuff scattered carelessly on the common room floor. His possessions were broken. His broom, which he had gotten as a present from his mother for being made a prefect, was in ten pieces scattered throughout the room. All of his robes were ripped and all the family pictures from home had graffiti on them. Words like fudge packer, queer, and fag covered them. Ron stood there in shock, his body unmoving, he felt helpless, limp, and distraught. Neville shook his head in revulsion and crossed over to him and stood beside him. After a moment, he placed his hand on Ron’s shoulder. Ron let it rest for a while, but then resentment got the better of him. He turned and pushed Neville to the floor. Neville fell back against the sofa where he laid in fetal position; hurt. Ron heaved in deep, forced breaths. His mind was spinning. He grabbed for the nearest photo with the word FAG written across the top. He leaned his head down and pressed his forehead to it, feeling its coolness. He flung it to the wall where is crashed and fell to the ground, the glass shattering into millions of pieces. He picked up another photo and pulled his arm back to throw it but was stopped by Neville who grabbed his hand from behind.

what asholes. i cant beelive they did this. especialy harry

Neville stood there in silence. He rubbed a finger across his lips and looked toward the door. Shaking his head, he walked toward the stairs and up to his dormitory.

lmfao. he was in his dorm!

“I’ll curse you Malfoy,” hollered Seamus. Malfoy looked amused.

“More than not you’ll set your self on fire,” she laughed.

lol true

He had caught them spying on him and Malfoy in the bathroom. He smiled to himself. Those girls were so dense.

lmfao noisey bitches ahah

“Well, she picked the wrong guy, because Harry’s gay,” confessed Ron. Malfoy choked on his spit and balled over laughing.

lol

omfg lavender forced seamus to rape ron just for gossip? what a freaking bitch

i love how malfoy is there for ron. its cute how ron spilt hot water on draco and then draco climbed into the water with him

“I’ll be back later; maybe with a get well gift,” he smirked.

“Something expensive right?” Ron joked.

“Only the best,”

lol

“I have someone stationed in each shop to help us. They will lead Malfoy where we are and he will catch you and me making out. You two will fight over me, he will win and then you can go as you please.”

what an idiot lol

“And Seamus?”

“He didn’t get in trouble. He was drugged wasn’t he? He’s being watched though.”

“What? They didn’t expel him too?” he bellowed

“No. he doesn’t remember doing anything. They believe his story.”

“I hope it doesn’t bother Ron,” she added.

“Doesn’t bother him? Hermione, he was raped by him and now he has to see him everyday.” He yelled

even though hes an glad he didnt get expelled because he didnt deserve it

“God, I’m gay,” he yelled. “There it’s out! Are you all happy now!” he yelled.

wow he admitted it. grr he better not ruin things with draco and ron

Malfoy was lying in the bed; his arms wrapped tightly around Ron. They were sleeping. Ron was holding Malfoy’s shirt tightly; exposing the bottom of Malfoy’s firm stomach. His head rested under Malfoy’s chin cuddling him. His breathing was slow and even. He looked completely relaxed; a look, Harry noticed, that Ron never showed when with him. Harry could just glimpse a platinum engraved ring on Ron’s finger. Malfoy had one too. There are two open bottles of butterbeer on the side table. This couldn’t be happening? Harry thought

i honastly dont like how you did that in a pov. i wish you did it so we can read it

“Harry, Ron loves you, not Malfoy. He would never choose him over you, trust me,” said Hermione. Harry looked unconvinced.

“Come on Harry, you’re being silly. It’s Malfoy we’re talking about here. What could Ron see in him?”

hmm lets see...harry laughed at him and trashed him. disowned him. just because he was too afraid to admit that he was gay also...and draco was hit ONLY friend for awhile.

Well, if you weren’t such a human incubator, I wouldn’t be so hot.” Malfoy joked.

“Are you as hungry as me right now,” asked Ron as he pulled looked around for food.

“Weasley, you’re always hungry,” cracked Malfoy as he poked Ron in the stomach

hahah

“When did you start calling me Weasley again?” asked Ron.

“When you started calling me Malfoy,” laughed Malfoy.

lmfao

I had to run to find some more butterbeer for you...” said Malfoy as he handed Ron the brownie.

“Yeah, says the person who drank my other one,” Ron laughed. Malfoy grimaced and shrugged, then sat on the bed bedside Ron, and pulled the covers back over him

lmfao

“That’s not fair, that things huge.” Ron said as he lowered the pillow that was protecting his face. Malfoy was lying back crying with laughter.

“If you can’t take the heat, don’t start the fire,” said Malfoy

LOL

“God, you’re a cow,” Malfoy joked. Ron frowned up at him and put a grape into his mouth.

i think that that is funny because ron frowns and then puts more food in this mouth haha

“Hahaha, funny,” retorted Ron as he pinched him hard on the arm. Malfoy fell back in pain, laughing at the top of his lungs.

“That’s all you got Weasley?” he smirked. Ron frowned and pinched him again.

lmfao. funy as hell haha

Malfoy would wear this ring again, he promised himself. He blew out the candle and closed his eyes and tried to sleep.

uh not if your with harry

i liked seamus and rons little talk

“Since he yelled “I’m gay,” at the top of his lungs in Hogsmeade,” Hermione snickered. Ron looked at Harry in amazement. He couldn’t believe this.

lol

Malfoy wasn’t there though for Goyle had just transfigured him into a goat. Ron grinned as Malfoy materialized in front of him. Malfoy looked around completely disoriented and there were pieces of chewed paper in his mouth. He turned and slapped Goyle across the head and Ron realized that they weren’t working together and that Goyle had accidentally transfigured Malfoy when he wasn’t looking. Malfoy looked around when he heard Ron laughing and their gazes met. Malfoy threw him a quick grimace before rounding on Goyle again.

lmfao funny as hell

“Malfoy?” Harry yelled, as he rushed toward Slughorn angrily. “Ron can’t work with Malfoy, can’t you change it?”

can you say controlling freak?

“Well, you’re dating Pansy,” sniffed Ron.

“Oh, yeah, I forgot about that.

lol

“Oops, we’re we gossiping again; silly us. I can’t have that happening,” laughed Parvati.

lol

“Do you want me to come with you?” Harry asked.

uh eww

“You might want to cover that up before Harry sees,” she whispered in his ear; her thumb caressing the hickie still fresh and hot on his neck.

He locked eyes with her as he moved his head to the side. He lifted his robe collar a little higher and swallowed nervously.

“You know?” he asked looking around at the three of them. He closed the door behind him and leaned against the portrait. His heart was racing for a whole different reason now. He was at their mercy again.

“Silly boy, I know everything,” she cackled softly. He opened his mouth to question her, but closed it just as quickly. He remembered now. In the library earlier, it had been them laughing behind the bookshelf. He cursed himself under his breath and glared angrily back at Parvati, who he saw was looking directly at him smiling.

“Ah, I see you’ve connected the dots. What a horrible thing you’re doing behind Harry’s back. You should be ashamed of yourself.”

She walked forward and placed both hands on either side of his face, bringing her face within inches of his.

“I bet you’re wishing you hadn’t thrown me from your dorm now aren’t you,” she grinned.

Ron thought back and he cursed him again. Damn karma, he thought.

“What are you going to do?” he asked.

She smiled and leaned forward kissing him lightly on the lips. Her hands caressed his thigh, but slowly made its way to his groin where his erection still lay. She groaned in her throat and kissed him on the cheek. She flicked her tongue out across his ear then pulled back to look into his now scarlet and scared face.

“Don’t worry; I’m not going to pull a Lavender, that bitch was disgusting. What I want I’m sure you’re going to enjoy.”

He highly doubted that, but he had no room for objections. He moaned silently and closed his eyes as Parvati gripped his erection through his pants. She squeezed and rubbed him up and down. Angelina and Katie watched in awe.

“I want to watch you and Malfoy fuck,” she whispered as she slid a hand into his jeans, gripping his erections and stroking fiercely. He grabbed her inserted hand and tried to pull it out, but Angelina and Katie stopped him. He opened his mouth to yell out when she stroked him firmly, rubbing the pre cum over the tip of his dick. He leaned his head back and moaned aloud.

“Do we have a deal?” she asked.

“No, why should I?” Ron asked.

“Because I don’t think Harry would be very happy to find out that you and Malfoy are still together. And I might let that little piece of information slip in casual conversation. I’ve been known to do that you know?” she smirked.

Ron leaned his head back against the wall as she continued to stroke him. He couldn’t let that happen. It would destroy Harry if he found out, and he knew that Hermione would never talk to him again. He had lied to them for so long, yet this was the biggest lie.

“So, do we have a deal?” she repeated. He looked down at her. Right now, having her watch him and Malfoy having sex seemed like a small price to pay to losing a life long friend.

“Deal,” he moaned.

She smiled menacingly as she continued to stroke him. He threw his head back as he came on her hand and in his boxers. She pulled her hand out of his jeans and rubbed a stream of cum on his lips before she kissed it off. She pulled a hankie from her pocket and wiped her hands clean.

“Ballypopperdoo,” she said to the now completely wide awake Fat Lady. She opened and the three girls climbed through. The Fat Lady closed behind him while Ron fastened his jeans again. He looked around at the portrait and saw that the Fat Lady was staring down at him.

“Ballypopperdoo,” he hissed angrily as he pulled his robe a little higher to cover his hickie.

“That was really quite disturbing yet really hot,” said the Fat Lady.

“Open the damn door lady,” he jeered at her pulling out his wand.

“Fine,” she called as the door opened and he climbed through. “It was sexy though,” she added.

HOLY SHIT shes a bitch and wow that was so hot

“I was attacked outside of the common room,” he confessed.

ya a pleasureable attack

“I didn’t say I liked him,” bellowed Ron. He stood and looked down at her. “I’m tired of you accusing me of being gay, just shove off all right.” With these words he left and didn’t look back

i just dont get why ron wont admit it. hermione is his best friend

“I’m sorry I didn’t do my homework Professor Snape...” said Neville with a tremble in his voice. Harry looked around at him, then back at Ron; they both started to laugh.

LMAFO

Ginny leaned in toward Ron, and whispered in his ear. “I know about you and Harry.” Ron froze, and his face paled, but he quickly recovered.

“What about me and Harry?”

“I know you like him, Hermione told me. I didn’t know you were gay.” Snickered Ginny

“I’m not gay, you git. Hermione, what have you been telling people.” Hermione looked his way.

“I thought I could tell Ginny, she is your sister.” Ginny bent over the table in a fit of laughter. Ron’s face burned hot as he grimaced at Hermione. His eyes caught those of Harry, and he felt his stomach drop. Harry looked at him, but his face was blank.

‘”My brother’s a queer!” laughed Ginny quietly. She punched him in the arm as she continued to laugh.

“Oops, I don’t want to hurt the fancy boy!” bellowed Ginny. Hermione laughed along with her. Ron stood up and left the table. They stopped laughing and look after him.

“You’re such a bitch, do you know that Ginny,” yelled Harry as he glared at Hermione. He stood and left the table. He ignored the sly look that Malfoy, from the slytherin table, threw at him. He could feel the eyes of other onlookers on him as he exited.

wow ginny is a stupid fucking bitch. and hermione is a bitch also. first she gets them to get detention. and then she goes behind his back and tells ginny? that is kinda rude and heartless of her. ron had not even admitted he was gay

“The only thing that we can wish for is that Malfoy doesn’t find out,” Said Ron. Harry told him that Malfoy may have overheard Ginny before they left the great hall.

i think he likes you ron

“Yeah, maybe “Weasley is a Gay King, or “Weasley is a Fudgepacker.” They laughed at this. Ron feels instantly better.

lol

Let’s slow down,” whispered Harry. Ron opened his mouth to respond when a girly giggle reached his ears. They looked around and spotted Moaning Myrtle floating a few inches from the ground behind them. She covered her mouth to stifle her high-pitched giggles. They hurriedly pushed back from each other; their faces burned with embarrassment.

“I see you haven’t given up spying on people Myrtle,” said Harry angrily.

“And a good thing I didn’t or I would have missed this midnight rendezvous.” Smirked Myrtle. Her fingers twisted with the prospects of conniving destruction. Ron pulled pink bubbles toward him and sunk lower into the water.

“Ooh, are you two dating or something.” Asked Myrtle as her smile was replaced with a grimace. She floated around to Ron and examined him from behind.

“You picked this over me,” she screamed pointing at Ron’s back, making angry attempts to poke him in his head, but only achieved the effect of sending icy chills through his body.

“Myrtle go away,” yelled Harry, but this only made her angry and she started to scream even louder.

“I thought you liked me Harry, but now I see you do not. If you can’t be with me then you can’t be with him and I’m guessing Filch doesn’t know about this little get together. I’ll just go wake him up. I’m sure he would like to be here.” She said all this very quickly

“No…!” yelled Harry and Ron together. But she ignored them and zoomed through the faucet. They could hear her as she screamed for Filch, eventually her voice disappeared. They looked at each other and they scrambled to get out of the bathroom before Filch could catch them. Harry checked to see that the coast was clear then they both hid under the invisibility cloak and raced to make it to their common room.

“We must catch them Mrs. Norris. It’s our chance to throw these sneaky hooligans from the school at last,” whispered Filch to his cat. He passed just behind Harry and Ron as they climbed the stairs to the eighth floor. They go unnoticed though, and they proceeded to theircommon room. When they are just outside there common room Harry pulled the cloak off and gave the password to the sleepy Fat Lady. They clambered through the door and then run upstairs to the dormitory.

lmfao that whole part was so funny

These were the wrong words, for he grabbed her, snatched her off the bed and threw her out the room. She landed on the floor in a heap, the only thing hurt being her gossipy ego.

“You stupid bitch! Stay out of my room!” he yelled. He slammed the door in her face. She stood up and brushed her skirt and shirt off. She caught her profile in a mirror, so she stopped and fixed her hair before she descended the stairs and crossed to her group of smiling friends.

wow that is kinda mean of ron. abusing her like that

“He’s not gay, but Harry definitely is,” she laughed.

lol

“He told me that you guys weren’t talking anymore. So, I asked him to explain why, and he said that you are a gossipy slut and a stuck up bitch!” She paused after this to let the words sink in. Hermione looked at her in amazement and her eyes started to tear up. The girls took this opportunity to comfort her.

“Did he really say that?” Hermione asked. All four girls nodded in unison.

lying bitches

“Well, who cares if he is gay or not? I’ll just assume he is,” said Lavender. “It makes my life easier. What’s hotter than Ron banging Potter?” she asked. They all looked at her confused. She rolled her eyes at them.

“Potter banging Malfoy, duh!” she added. “You guys are so dense

uh no. ron and draco

hmm so harry punched ron in front of seamus...wow that is going to change rons feelings about harry...i hope. because i think draco likes ron. and eamus. gr. i catn believe him. jerk

here is my feedback for 1-4 chapters. ill read the rest later and send you the rest in

“Umm, I had to tie my shoe.” said Ron. Harry looked at Hermione.

“I had to help him….” But before Harry could respond, Dumbledore stands and begins to speak.

*snorts* YA he really needed help haha

Ron looked at his in shocked disbelief.

“We’re sitting down here killing ourselves, and you had the answers all along?” asked Ron. He pulled the paper from Harry and copied the rest of the answers onto his paper.

lol

40 points from slytherian? WOW so soon in the year?that sucks

mr. Potter, Mr. Weasley.., detention tomorrow afternoon, my office,” bellowed McGonagall.

“WHAT!” yelled Harry and Ron together.

“We get attacked by a mad cat and we get detention?” yelled Ron.

“Provoking a helpless animal is against school rules. Detention, my office, 8 o’clock; that’s final,” yelled McGonagall. Ron and Harry both stared at Neville and Hermione, hoping they would confess. Neville looked toward the floor and nervously twirled his wand; Hermione began to pack, not looking at them. The bell rang for the end of class. Everyone around them packed and left, but Harry and Ron just stood there in disbelief.

“Are you serious?” asked Ron as he looked after Hermione and Neville who exited the room.

“Get a move on boys, or it will be ten points from Gryffindor” called McGonagall.

holy shit that is freaking harssh.

i honastly am not a big harry and ron fan so i hope draco and ron get together soon.

well you erned this and me reading the next chapter. i'm sure you don't care wether i read all of your story or not but. just thought i would let you know. this also means i think your doing a good job. and thats somthing i would think you care about. well on i go.

* snugle Ron. * " love you evan if Harry dasent. oh and i think if he dasn't someone els das! well bye! " * runs off*

nevdr use this line: "It felt so right." whether it be yaoi, yuri, or even hentai. its cliche, biased, and irrelevant. plus, it makes eyes roll. honestly, how can people judge what is right? if its right, there's no need to defend it.

the dialogues at the end feel a bit controlled. if it was more realistic, i think hermione would have added, "but i thought you'd be an acception; you're her brother!"

new chapter! thank you! it's been so long and i love this chapter so much!

what's harry going to do? i am afraid the Malfoy will react badly if he knows about draco and ron.

Yeah! Yes I forgot abouot this fic, and when I realized which one it was I got so excited. This is definetly one of the best Ron/Draco stories around. Ron's had such problems I hate to see what he may have to face later, but I DO want to read it.

wait, whats with neville? dont tell me hes gay too...

whoa, this is so interesting! i luv the fight between the grls...it makes it soo realistic...keep going!

I did my duty as a reader and signed up to purly so I could reply to this.

~I am known for terrible spelling and grammar and typo's but this story rials anything I have written to the point of becoming difficult to read at some points

~The general flow of emotional background that is needed for this type of liturature is absent. It extends to the point of the reader sympathising with the situation, but not understanding the chacter at all. To boost, the personalities of the main characters are different from those characters in Rowling's books which makes it all the more difficult to sympathise with the characters.

~I pulled an all-nighter to try to get through this and Ive finally decided that chapter 20 is where Im ending this. I cant fathom how someone can read through a sexscene so unrealistic as to not express pain while reciving anal sex. Unrealistic.

~Not just the characters personalities, but random facts in the story dont go hand-in-hand with the book. A warning before reading the story is in order so that the reader doesnt assume that just because Slughorn is the potions teacher in this story, doesnt mean that Harry is by any means his favorite student. ect.

Overall I dont suggest this story to anyone who is looking for a story about the characters in Harry Potter. However if your seeking a story using the rough character outline of the people in the Harry Potter books than by all means, read this mutalated version of the book.

I'd keep reading, but I have to work tomorrow. Suffice it to say that I'm going to enjoy finishing this fic. For a while I thought it might be TOO much like some HP soap opera, but you apparently fixed most of that in this chapter. Anyhow, I know you're finished with the story, but I just thought I'd leave a review here before I went to sleep and lost all of my current thoughts on the subject. I'll be looking for more of your work in future.

I really enjoyed this story...and i'm almost afraid of a sequel...well actually it's more like a fearful anticipation...Harry, Parvati, Pansy, and Lavender's crazy ass all together can't produce anything good...but i can't wait to see what you come up with next!