Shallow. Weak woman

Wow, you weren’t kidding when you said he’d need to transform in front of her

I think the question at this point is... why doesn’t Paulina WANT to face what’s in front of her?

Wow, that was honestly a pretty good ending. I mean, I perfer Sam and Danny, but I also like Paulina. I think the ending served well because he just really didn't decide, but you could tell he still had feelings for Sam.

Loved this story! I'm unsure what the sequel is, but I'll be looking for it in your stories.

It's me again. You know, in addition to the big reveal (don't you just love hindsight? Hehe.), I noticed that Paulina may have unintentionally done another something good, at least as far as Sam is concerned. Namely, dressing in something Sam's mother picked out. If Sam's relationship with her parents is to ever improve, somebody has to meet the other half-way. Paulina may have "helped" her take that first step.
And that was definitely a nice thing to say to Tucker. If only he'd keep the PDA in his pocket, he might have better luck with his love-life.
I look forward to the next chapter of this or the revised version.

This was good. While I think I preferred the scenario in which Paulina was the goth (I think it adds extra depth, challenge, and drama), these alternate scenes certainly have merit. I kind of agree with that question: what if the circumstances surrounding Paulina and Sam had been different? (I actually thought something similar about the cartoon 6teen).
I think Clockwork's got quite the parade to look at concerning these stories surrounding Paulina and Delphine. Alternate paths and endings. These alternate arguably be seen as a alternate path to potentially the same destination as your canon version of this story. A good, in-depth overall plot. Just a thought.
I look forward to your next chapter, be it this or the re-mastered version.

I really enjoyed this story and think you are an excellent writer . maybe it's the fact I am a guy but I would let danny date them both as the two girls became friends

Interesting alternative version of this fanfic You write here. What about the alternative ending?
I see nothing wrong with Paulina's versions shown in fanfics like Yours. After all, I preffer fanfics based on the cartoon over the original story itself that sucks(in romantic case).

Well wow, this brought a hell of a lot of feelings of nostalgia.

Anyway, quite the long read but if there is anything that can be said about your interpretation of Paulina is that you gave her some good character development from time to time.

Invader Johnny Signing Off.

I really enjoyed the alternate chapter 13 you posted. I liked the others. 13 just resonated within me.

English is not my mother tongue so please forgive me if i make any gramma mistake in my review.
First, i want to say that i really like your fanfic. Being a fan of Paulina, i'm looking for a romantic fanfic with her as a main character. And your fanfic, that chapter with Paulina dances with Danny Phantom in Dash's party, make me feel happy when reading it. The reason i become a fan of Paulina is her two-side personality. She only cares about money and apperance but she like Danny Phantom because of his kindness and herotic. Your fanfic keeps that personality of her , that make me feel very interesting reading it.
Second, i feel disapointed about the ending... at first time reading it, because i want a happy ending for Paulina. I want Paulina and Danny become a couple at the end of the story. But after couple of times reading the last chapter, i think maybe ending like that more suitable with this fanfic. If Danny choose to be with Paulina, it Will make Sam hurt. Danny never want to hurt his best friend so it can't be happen. And now Paulina has changed and liked both human and ghost form of Danny, Danny can't ignore those sincere feeling of her . He feel like both of them, 2 beautiful girls and have in love with him from the bottom of their heart. He make a right dession : not to be with anyone of them , for now and for their sake. They all too young for a real ,serious relationship, i guess.
Final, i hope you will write more chapters. Maybe write about they go to university. And if that happens, i hope you will give us a true and happy ending.
P/s : i read your fanfic in my 18 birthday. It was a wonderful feeling.

OMG this fic was so well thought out! That book you are writting must be good. Its like you analized your own story to us to explain some things and to me it wasnt nesesary but maybe for others it was, but anyway I liked reading it, it made the story look cooler somehow and I enjoyed it more. The swich was really original. The characters were so well written Its hard to imagine someone completly hatting Paulina after reading this. Talking about that, I dont know if Sanchez is her cannon surname but I believe its a really comon one, like Garcia, at least I can tell you that I've met 3 Sanchezs, and I dont know a lot of people ( I live in LatinAmerica). Anyway I really enjoy this, so thanks for sharing! And even if it feels like a waste of time sometimes wrintting fanfics its a good practice, olso you can explore new rutes and ways of writting with the freedom of "bah its just fanfic" that you might use later, plus the insta feedback, and other stuff that you surelly already find out. Anyway thanks for the ride, it was great

I dont mind any pearings I am just here to see paulina freak aut! Haha I am no fan of Paulina but I dont dislike her either, its because you writte her so well that her character and story works, that can make all the difference, you can make an usually loved character bad and the other way araund to. This kind of swich seemed really original and well thought out, I am really enjoying it!

Your story kept me intrigued to the cliffhanging end. This has to be in my top 3 in FanFictions for everything, which is something hard to do since I'm so picky, and I have to say I can not wait for more. I can appreciate great writing when I see it and give ya Kudos (: My hopes are that you continue on with the sequel! I will be looking forward to it!~

~PharaohJill

Part 29 notes:

Final part! Yay.

My author's note: Indeed, I need to better convey Danny's thought processes concerning these girls in his life. I thought it would be obvious considering his actions in the show, but I can't rely on readers picking up on all of that...

Should I have Paulina respond more to being overshadowed by Kitty?

Paulina gives Sam a devious look? My thought was that Paulina still doesn't like Sam. Sure, she's changed, but her views on Sam are still more or less the same. She lived AS Sam, but she never got to know Sam like she got to know Danny and Tucker. If I want to keep this in, I need to better convey that.

Originally, Danny became a little cross with Sam after she pulled the "I've always liked both sides of you" card. I took it out because it seemed way too mean on his part, and I didn't want to upset my readers anymore than I had. :b And it was more my own personal thing I wish I could yell at Sam for rather than something I think Danny would actually call her out on, so I took it out. I'll probably post it as a bonus deleted scene.

The last line is meant to be humorous, but I think maybe it's too confusing? :/ It's just that Paulina definitely has a sense of humor, and I wanted to demonstrate that here even when she's been defeated. She's no quitter!

This ending is meant to lead right into the sequel. However, I think for the rewrite, I would offer three endings: one with Danny and Paulina, one with Danny and Sam, and one leading into the sequel. Then, readers could go with whatever satisfies them. :)

Overall, there are parts of this fic that I'm definitely not happy with, but I'm pleased with what I have written! It doesn't need a big overhaul at all, honestly, but it still definitely needs a rewrite. Fun to reread, though! I was very passionate about this story even if it was just a fanfic, and it definitely shows! And I think my readers could tell just how much I loved it, too, even with all of its flaws.