"But I love my green socks!" Seventeen pleaded. "I don't care; green socks don't match with what you are wearing!" Eighteen braked back.
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Hahahah *in song-song voice* Loooooved it!
I just love 17 and 18 soooooo much and I love reading funny fics about them... This was great! :3
But just a note, you should start new paragraphs when someone new speaks to make it less confusing... Other than that, I really liked it and am looking forward to chapter two!

Poor Seventeen, having to get knew clothes. I can't wait to see what he'll end up wearing. Update soon.

Aw, poor Seventeen. ):

Knowing Eighteen and how she likes only the designer clothes, Seventeen will probably be stuck wearing something fancy, like a suit. Knowing Seventeen with his childish, bad-boy attitude, he'll hate ANYTHING that's the slightest bit fancy.

Oh well. I like this story, and I think it'll probably be funny.

The only thing I think you should work on is putting spaces between senteces so that it doesn't look all like one paragraph. This makes it easier to read and understand, you see.

You should also work on your grammar; adding commas, and making it clear who's speaking at the moment.

Here's an example from your story, and I'm going to add commas where they're needed so that you have a better idea of what exactly I'm talking about.

"Where do you think all the humans are, Seventeen?" Eighteen asked. (In a sentence or question, when referring to the person you're talking to, you should add a comma so that it is shown that you are referring to them, instead of talking about them.)

"They're hiding like the little rats they are, waiting and dreaming for a world they will never have again." Seventeen answered his sister. (They're is broken down into 'they are', which would suit this sentence better than 'there', which refers to a place, not people. Also add commas and periods so that the sentence isn't running on without a stop.)

"What about blondie and his little sidekick?"

"What do you think they're doing?" "Good question, sis, they're probably training, hey Eighteen how about the next time we see blondie we kill him; I kind of want to see what the kid will do, so do you want to?"

This could get confusing for the readers, because they may have some difficulty knowing who's talking at the time.

To prevent this problem, you should write that part like this:

"What about blondie and his little sidekick? What do you think they're doing?" Eighteen asked curiously.

"Good question, sis. They're probably training." Seventeen replied, "Hey, Eighteen, how about the next time we see blondie we kill him? I kind of want to see what the kid will do, so do you want to?" Seventeen asked, waiting to hear if his sister agreed.

Adding commas and periods where they are needed makes it easier to understand what you're reading. Adding detail helps viewers picture the scene and understand what is going on.

Along with working on your grammar, maybe you should put thoughts in italics, so that it's easier to see the difference between thoughts and said words.

Please don't take this as a flame. I'm not trying to be mean, I'm just trying to help you become an even better writer, and I want to point out your mistakes before someone else flames you without the slightest bit of compassion or gentleness.

If you need help, you can e-mail me the next chapter of your story and I'll read over it and correct any mistakes in grammar while giving you advice on how to make the story better or how to add more detail. (:

Anyway, I like your story, and the androids, and I hope you can update soon!

Wow Mouse...

You really have no life at your new house? Do you? LOL!

I love your story so far! By the way, I think you should make 18 get 17 a PINK bandanna. Imagine what would happen then. YAY! More dead people!

Neways, I think you should write a Furuba fanfic. Since you won't stop BUGGING ME ABOUT IT!

If you don't, I'll send Daddy after you. :)

And no. Legato can't kill daddy and neither can any of the other boys you love from the animes. Not even Meril. Ok?

So be a good girl and write more stories! Thankies!

HAHAHA! Poor Seventeen! Can't wait to see what Eighteen whips up for her darling brother! D