Reviews for Open Your Eyes |
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![]() ![]() ![]() (reacts by faking biting a cyanide capsule and shooting self in the head) Aaauuggh! Great job! |
![]() ![]() Type your review here.I'ts so sweet and so romantic. |
![]() ![]() ![]() nice job. when is this set after? (what game?) |
![]() ![]() ![]() Pretty good! A bit too lovey-dovey, but good. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I am a total MarcoxFio fan as well for there is not other coupling I love more than the great MarcoxFio coupling indeed! I love this story so much indeed! :D I hope there could be more good stories like this soon! :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() Cute story! Hope you write more Metal Slug fanfics! (seeing that there aren't many around here...) |
![]() ![]() ![]() Oh my god, Marco and Fio is a lovebird! Does it has a series on this? Please say yes! |
![]() ![]() ![]() It's a pretty good story, although I have a few problems with it. 1. A new paragraph is made every time a new person speaks (Example: After Morden tells Marco that he's going to die, a new paragraph should start with Marco voicing his opinion). 2. A few typos here and there, but that can be ignored. 3. The tense of verbs needs to match, plus the flow could use some work. Overall it's a nice concept. I'm a fan of the Metal Slug series myself and my favorite character is Trevor Spacey, and fav. pairing is TrevorxNadia. I'm working on a fic myself, so you can look forward (in the near future) to a fic involving them. Anyway, once again it's a good fic, just work on the grammar and it could be much better and easier to read. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Yay! the third Metal Slug fic! Good job man, keep up the cool work! Let's make more MS fics! I'm currently working on my 4th MS novel (I only published two here, the other one was hentai). I will be wainting for your future works ;) PD: Tarma and Eri rulz! |