Damn powerful story. Awesome stuff.

considering that I started this story deeper than I’d like to be on your stupid scale, figuring out early that she meant finding Asuka literally felt pretty rewarding

(Do Not put a girl as the center of your life) Good fic, kinda confusing at times though

Utter perfection. That's when the great idea, passion, and the ability to execute it all meet. Not a thing I can think of what needs changing in this story. And, as good it is on its own, it gives justice to the characters of NGE it focuses on and their traumas, too. Good job.

I felt exactly the same as when I watched EoE for the first time. Very well written story.

I don't usually review things, but I absolutely had to this time. This is by far the best fan fiction I have ever read. The flow of the story and the unveiling of the characters and circumstances is fantastic. The subtle ways it reveals where in the timeline of the original series it takes place was done flawlessly. The writing itself is above and beyond standard fan fiction levels. This is a short story that I'd be happy to read even without any connection to the Evangelion universe. Standing ovation. Well done.

I just wanna take the time to let you know how much I love and appreciate this story because I've never read a asushin/post- instrumentality story quite like this one. Not that they're bad or anything, but it's quite a change of pace, especially because it never occurred to me that it's entirely plausible for Asuka to "lose her mind," for lack of better words, after the whole ordeal. So I just want to applaud you for such a story that explores Asuka's psyche AND, on top of that, involves one of her biggest fears. Amazing job. Definitely one of my favorite Eva fanfics to date.

This is garbage, you fucking idiot.

I gotta say, for what talent you have...what a dark morbid non-ended story. I see what enormous potential was here and this just doesn't measure up. It stopped but didn't end. I wonder if this is a sarcastic style or you're really a jerk or something. So much talent though...

I apologise, if my initial comment was not coherent, although, in case you are, understandably, confused, by "protective", I meant that Shinji was able to formulate thoughts, and opinions, in regards to Asuka's condition, and that he was, also, able to provide for her, physically, psychologically, and verbally.

As for your author's note, I've noticed that, as someone who claims that their readers are unintelligible, you cannot spell, "criminally", properly, can you?

I apologise, if I did not get my message across, in my initial connect. By "protective", I meant that you were portraying Shinji, in a light, that assumes that he is aware of his own purpose, in life, and how he feels, in regards to particular situations, to the extent, that he does not hesitate, to provide for Asuka, physically, psychologically, and verbally, and, to the extent, that he is able to form coherent opinions, in regards to Asuka's condition.

I would, also, like to note that you refer to people, that are on "level four", according to your claims, as "criminaly stupid", despite the fact that you do not seem to be able to spell the word, "criminally", correctly.

I found your cliff notes, and "proofing", quite offensive, despite the fact that I am at "level one", according to you. Your characters, and, in particular, Shinji are quite "out of character", although I assume that you recreated Shinji, turning him in to a protective figure, because you have inserted yourself in to Asuka's character, and, like Asuka, that is who you wish Shinji was. I was contemplating reading the rest of this fanfiction, but your author's note has appalled me, due to its condescending tone, and transparent belittlement.

So uh... I did figure out the 'twist' about a third of the way into the story, and my mind was completely blown. The lines of dialogue that I read before I figured it out completely gained a new meaning and I immediately scrolled back up to piece everything together in my mind once again. Wow, what a brilliant idea, and the execution was brilliant as well. The rest of the story is also A writing, but this chapter as it stands alone, is one of my favorite things I've read on the site.

Also, the author's note for the first chapter was hilarious!

I've loved every single part of this story. It's sweet, well written and touching. Thank you for having written it.

Whoa, I'm still alive.

Regardless, I went on a binger for the sake of nostalgia the last few nights, and re-read a few stories from years past. This one only vaguely rung a bell, but it was well worth the read. I think you would agree when I say that the first chapter would have been an amazing one-shot had you left it alone, but that's not to say that this story wasn't good. Quite the opposite, it's (in my opinion) the best thing you've written. I can tell you went way out of your way to make the reader uncomfortable with the writing style as to portray the insanity in Asuka, as well as the building mental breakdown in Shinji and Misato. When this started in chapter 2, I was very disappointed, because I thought it was just who you'd become as a writer... yeah, I was clearly wrong. Well played, well played.

I believe you know the bulk of my stories, and you know angst is my strong suit. This story, though, hurt the heart. The ending wouldn't have been half as sad if Asuka just hung herself. Asuka realized she hated herself, Shinji turned into a husk of a person, Misato just became weak. Beautifully done, Fresh C. I hope you kept up writing throughout the years.