Just wanted to comment real quick and say I really like your story. I love how you just jump right into the action and I think your style of writing really helps represents the characters. Keep up the great work!

this was a really amazing story. I absolutely loved it ;)

What happened to this thugger toughgumarioy I thought he was mexi4 but it turns out he "Girl You Know It'sbank True"... "Blame It On The hsbcRain" ass McThugnet - we don't believe you. You need an infantry, cavalry & a fuckin miracle on ice 2 convince me. Sellout pu$$y ;)

The characters learned and grew as the story progressed, so good job there. :)
Also, the chapter titles were very clever and fun. :D

Hmmm, So Charlie was able to NOT have his dream come true. I bet that will help Charlie feel stronger than ever. Now I'm off tto finish the rest of the story. :)

Well, I think Don way over reacted and is being selfish.
I wanted to tell you that I like how you portrayed both of the brothers in their despondency on being alone. Good job.

Great ending!:D

great idea! but maybe next time you could shorten the amount of time it tokk him to get there, maybe by like 20 in or so, i think by 20 the whole place would be in flames, heck even 10 min is a pretty long time
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Oh I love it

Aw, sweet ending! I'm crying now!

Amazing ending to a very good and perfect story. I loved every part of this whole story. Excellent piece of work.

Alright I was planning to review somewhere in the middle of the story and after this chapter the choice of when to review was clear to me. what drama and emotion and angst and more! Love this story! Don really hit the spot when he said "are you blind?" I have no idea how they are gonna make up, but I'll be sure to keep reading untill I find out. I can't really chose sides because I feel both brothers have an excellent point; charlie protecting his brother fomrt he guilt that could become so great he might kill himself and Don feeling betrayed by his own brother about something that is a very very big deal especially for a mathetician (not sure if I wrote that correct). Anyway love the story so far and I'm off to read some more. Oh and i also liked your story "protect me" and I'm kinda switching between this one and the sequel now. All three great stories!

um, just an FYI, dopamine is a neurotransmitter that that the body produces for certain functions in the brain-not a pain killer or sedative.

I love this story. It's really touching. Apso-bloomin-lootly love it.

Omg, that was such a beautiful story! The interaction between Don and Charlie was so realistic and wonderful, and when Don was angry and away, I felt Charlie's pain. Sometimes the emotion seemed a bit over-dramatized, but I like the way you built this story on character and emotion, it made it come to life. Great writing, excellent dialogue, awesome characterization - you're the best! :) !